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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2002-10-16 09:42 AM


~Soft tears cleanse slowly
yesterday's suffering heart.
Broken spirits weep~




She never let it show~
from the outside looking in
nobody could have known,
she didn't cry~
she didn't shout~
I was blind but I see now
she was breaking from the inside....
out.  {as sung by Tracy Lawrence}

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (10-17-2002 11:13 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-10-16 09:45 AM



This is way too sad for a Wednesday...don't you start with the tears now...I'm not UP for it!  

Very lovely, m'dear...very nice...but very sad...

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2002-10-16 09:52 AM


Donna, I'm starting to weep! Please tell me that this is just poetry and not for real! A spirit as sweet and gentle as yours, should never be made sad.

This is exceptionally well-written!

--- A teardrop of a gem.

Linda

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3 posted 2002-10-16 09:54 AM


Wednesdays tears. I can feel them dear friend. This is a sad beauty. Nicely done.
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4 posted 2002-10-16 11:46 AM




(big hugggssssss) I know these tears of yesterday ever so well, sweet friend, when I was a little boy I suffered everyday seemingly and today it feels they've returned! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, I send angel hugs to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-10-16 04:09 PM


Oh my, another sad write.  *hugs* my friend.  You can even make sadness sound lovely.  Wish I had such talent.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

majnu
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6 posted 2002-10-16 05:31 PM


touching. its simplicity is its strength.

one small note.

i think you want yesterday's not yesterdays (as in posessive vs. plural)

Toerag
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7 posted 2002-10-16 06:00 PM


You need an evening with Toerag and some strong "spirits" to wash away your blues gal....
Enchantress
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8 posted 2002-10-16 06:04 PM


Donna~Now if Toe's reply didn't make you smile...
well, I don't know what will.
This is too sad for you sweetie..
Very well done...hope all is well.
~Big Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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9 posted 2002-10-16 07:07 PM


GentleSpirit~
A very 'touching' Senryu~

'If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...'

Sleep well, my friend ... for you have indeed 'touched' many a heart this day~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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10 posted 2002-10-16 09:08 PM


Donna, you can put so much meaning into such few words. Thanks for sharing.
Love to All,
Ethel

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11 posted 2002-10-16 09:16 PM


However sad, very well done. Sort of haunting.
Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2002-10-17 07:56 AM


I want to thank you all so very much for
the support I find here at Passions.

Toe, I have no doubt in my mind that
an evening with Toe and some much
stronger spirits than my own would
be just what is needed.  Thank you
for that, it is so very appreciated

and yes Nancy, of course
it touched a smile upon my face.

Thank you all.  

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

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13 posted 2002-10-17 02:43 PM


Sad but beautiful.  Hugs.  

[This message has been edited by sigheyes (10-17-2002 02:45 PM).]

sigheyes
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14 posted 2002-10-17 02:47 PM


Duplicated by mistake*

[This message has been edited by sigheyes (10-17-2002 03:10 PM).]

Gentle Spirit
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15 posted 2002-10-17 03:36 PM


Thank you SE and hugs to you too.
Toerag
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16 posted 2002-10-17 04:05 PM


I could come on over to your house, take off all my clothes, make mad passionate love to you....and if that didn't make you laugh out loud hysterically, nothing would!!!
Suetang
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17 posted 2002-10-18 12:23 PM


Hello Donna

Beautiful images were seen through your lovely words.  I hope all is well with you.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Gentle Spirit
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18 posted 2002-10-18 11:17 AM


Toe, I don't know if I would be laughing at
you  or not, but I am POSITIVE that you would be laughing at me.   Thanks for a smile.

Thanks Sue.  I appreciate the concern,
I will be fine.  Thank you.  Hugs.


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19 posted 2002-10-23 10:44 PM


Donna~ Such sad words from such a beautiful heart. May your tears turn to those of joy...Paul
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