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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-08-27 03:29 AM

there is no art
that can truly convey
the meaning

the wispy scrawl
the guttural choke of primate throat
the tiny spectrum of paint
the sounds of metal and wood

Let us create a new language
one direct
from the source
a logos
of understanding

the world
revealed
with but a
look
and a
smile

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

[This message has been edited by brian sites (08-27-2002 03:34 AM).]

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-08-27 08:14 AM

the world
revealed
with but a
look
and a
smile

Sounds like a great idea to me. Especially when you put it so well. Great poem.

Touch me with your whispers,
and I'll listen with my heart.

Tammy Blessing
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 366
PA

2 posted 2002-08-27 10:29 AM

Inadequate words
eloquently written
But by your last smile
I am truely smitten

Nice write!
Tammy

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2002-08-27 10:31 AM

You are going to get me started again--this is something I started thinking about when I had babies, and I would look in their eyes and wonder how/what they were thinking without words--then I hit upon Carl Jung, and the symbolism of collective unconscious and YES, Joseph Campbell, and I started thinking a little deeper about the Old Testament and the Tower of Babel--and things all fell together so beautifully, like when you find an integral puzzle piece that helps you connect chunks you thought too dis-similar to even consider them part of the same whole, and geez...I'm running my head...er fingers, again, and I haven't even had my coffee!

But jeez...great poem bri. I think I understood it! *giggle*

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-08-27 10:32 AM

Well, then, everything the Serene One said, and then...

thank you.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-08-27 11:50 AM

Ah brian, when you get Sen to flex her brain muscles at length IN A REPLY, that's something special.

I love your poetry of the gesture.

Mike

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

6 posted 2002-08-27 11:25 PM

And to think, all this time, I've gotten by with a smile and a nod.

A look and a smile is far more substantial.

Ah, Jeez, you got karenity all wound up.

~Ed

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

7 posted 2002-08-27 11:28 PM

thanks everybody

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

8 posted 2002-08-31 10:20 AM

the first three stanzas are so rich in image.... you use the language so very well...

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