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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-08-26 05:58 PM

With piteous eye the look befell
the forlorn gaze of consciousness.
His thoughts of her he wished to tell
but such was strong his own duress

As winds did howl on frozen plain
of hearts in beat of waiting seize
To grace the brow in warming rain
till fell the flow of chill in breeze.

Does not the mind remain once clear
and save the warmth of one’s last dream
To bring from in the sound of cheer
and flow beyond the wandering stream.

Give unto this my bounteous love
and whence one mome’ does then arise
to fly the winged wanting dove
into the clear of clouded skies.

For as the heaven clears to blue
and rays then fall in golden shine
I bequeath my life to Ye, I do...
To thee my love, dear Madeline.

[This message has been edited by Magnus (08-26-2002 05:59 PM).]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2002-08-26 06:45 PM

ahhhh, the wharf and weft of your weave in this is a gentle rolling of the tide

enjoyed the read even if I don't know how to spell wharf and weft maybe it's warp and weft

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2002-08-26 06:52 PM

VAS...I do love your style....Gee...I don't
know either.....the wharf and weft???

But it certainly sounds OK to me....kinda
like the Yin and Yang....the too and fro..

Thanx..

mag.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

3 posted 2002-08-26 07:12 PM

Barry... I think Virginia meant the "weave and the weft"
A very beautiful poem, indeed...
Woven well...

~ hugs from a wefty chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

4 posted 2002-08-26 07:48 PM

A true romantic!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-08-26 08:02 PM

(smiles) Oh Barry, this is soooooo beautiful, Madeline is so lucky to have a wonderful faithful love like you, this is gorgeous! (big hugggsssss) This is heavenly heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2002-08-26 08:02 PM

Barry

This is so beautiful...truly enjoyed!

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2002-08-26 09:04 PM

Barry, this makes me think of one of my favorite old poems, by Longfellow ,
"Evangeline"
Very old world feel, perfectly composed.
Sandra

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2002-08-26 10:13 PM

Bravo!

powerofthysword
Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 116
Glendale, AZ USA

9 posted 2002-08-27 12:00 PM

I must say, you sure have the talent to brighten anyone's day. Well written poem that delivers with each paragraph.

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

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