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jellybeans
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0 posted 2002-08-23 03:39 PM


in the most demanding times when
the sun is not yet here and not yet gone
she starts and ends with the dulling drone
of mindless tasks (the ones she calls
the need be done’s)

in the heat of the day one would tend to
think her busy as she flutters and
flits from thing to thing (she strictly
avoids proximity’s scorching grasp)

when darkness falls and the shadows scan
for frail fluttering things she hangs upside
down on the ceiling (nothing a miss from her
nightly illusion)

© Copyright 2002 jellybeans - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2002-08-23 03:45 PM


jellybeans
Only a bat would enjoy this more than I.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2002-08-23 03:56 PM


Wow!  Enjoyed the smile...
Now this would be worth posting twice.
Excellent write.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-08-23 03:57 PM



Nah, can't be true...
you're not the REAL batwoman, are you?
Enjoyed this one!

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4 posted 2002-08-23 05:03 PM


Uh-huh... thought you'd sneak this one past me, did you? *G*

On the other hand... what can I say that I haven't already? *G* This was good in its early stages... and "metamorphed" into greatness. *sly grin*

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5 posted 2002-08-23 05:04 PM


This is a real smile maker.  Enjoyed it.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

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6 posted 2002-08-23 05:53 PM


thank you all.....if you knew what a rough(to quote suthern) metamorphosis this thing had you would laugh.....sigh my muse has been 'unavailable for the moment' for more moments than I want to count....
really appreciate your encouragement and smiles

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7 posted 2002-08-23 06:42 PM


JellyGal~
I like the all of it ...~
Most enjoyable thought-flutter~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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8 posted 2002-08-23 11:52 PM




Wow, I love these powerful thoughts, sweet friend, this is excellent and spins with such delirious wonders, I love it! (sigh) Your words always amaze me, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2002-08-23 11:55 PM


Bats are really, really cool, and so is this poem.
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10 posted 2002-08-23 11:58 PM


jellybeans

I know about the need be dones...and the rest is just lovely you.  Much enjoyed!!

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