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Madame Chipmunk
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0 posted 2002-09-03 01:44 PM


~Drawn Soft by Your Soul~



Hatchets of hatred
hurled without thought
can cut to the core
drawing blood

missiles of malice
aimed at the soul
will burst the essence of trust

words, carelessly flung
can untie even the tightest
ribbons of esteem

and self-portraits
we've learned to draw
with the delicate ink of beauty
can be so quickly erased

smeared by a thoughtless critic
in a single mortifying moment

an image so fragile
the selves whom we know
can be shattered for always
with one heedless phrase

the lack of tact
searing deep and forever

***

hold on tight
hold on to the self
the one that you know
in your mind
to the one that you feel
in your heart
that you are

don't let go
of the beauty inside
of the lovely picture
drawn soft by your soul
the flower of spirit
that glows
through the light
in your eyes

wear it proud
let them see
that the evil is THEIRS to behold
not YOURS
~




Lyra

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Blue Kitty
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1 posted 2002-09-03 01:48 PM


Wasn’t sure I was going to like this, but it turns out nice, so that’s good.  The poem’s goodly done even if it hadn’t turned nice and positive.  I didn’t see it befor so it’s new to me and I like it.
Madame Chipmunk
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2 posted 2002-09-03 01:58 PM


Thanks so much, Bk... I'm glad that you enjoyed it...
~ hugs from a rodent of a different stripe

Lyra

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3 posted 2002-09-03 03:23 PM


Lyra, you've only written the truth ... and so beautifully

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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4 posted 2002-09-03 03:30 PM


Great work....I enjoyed this very much.

DeaDiAmore

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5 posted 2002-09-03 03:41 PM


Lyra~How very very true this is!
Well done sweet lady.
~Hugs~

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6 posted 2002-09-03 05:01 PM




(big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I too think that poetry can be analyzed but should never be criticized and it hurts me to see ones own personal thoughts always attacked like mine used to! (sigh) Yes Kacy, follow her advice for you truly are special and deserve so much respect as I truly think you have amazing talent, we all love you both so much, God Bless You! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Lyra and Kacy, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-03-2002 05:01 PM).]

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7 posted 2002-09-03 05:24 PM


These cut and bled words,
wrapped in bandages of soft verse.
Awesome, Lyra.

Mike

Madame Chipmunk
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8 posted 2002-09-03 08:37 PM


Thanks so much, Dr. Love... Are you a psychiatrist>
~ hugs and love for the doc

Lyra

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9 posted 2002-09-03 08:38 PM


Thanks so much, Dea...
I'm glad you enjoyed...
~ lots of hugs

Lyra

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Madame Chipmunk
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10 posted 2002-09-03 08:39 PM


Definitely true, Nancy...
Self esteem is so very important.
~ esteemed hugs

Lyra

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Madame Chipmunk
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11 posted 2002-09-03 08:45 PM


Noah... thanks so much for your reply...
I don't think there is anything wrong with criticizing a poem, as long as it isn't done maliciously... afterall, how otherwise would we learn to write it.
Its just that some people criticize the poet and not the poem... and that is really nasty.
This poem is really about a woman's self esteem and how parents have to be really careful about saying negative things to their daughters about their appearences...
but you are right that it can be applied to poetry also...
Thanks so much...
~ loving hugs

Lyra

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Madame Chipmunk
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12 posted 2002-09-03 08:47 PM


Mr.Squirrel,  I love the way you stated that.
Even your replies are poetic.
~ furry rodent hugs

Lyra

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13 posted 2002-09-03 10:24 PM


Wow, Lyra!  love the style you used here.  
It's the message that hurts...the missles used to bring people down in building up a fragile and hurtful ego.  My step-father laid the whipping-words on my back many times.  The scars never heal, although i still call him father.

jeff

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14 posted 2002-09-03 10:57 PM


Lyra ~~ You are some powerful writer!!! Words are so powerful and can hurt so very much when they are used to attack. And that attack can be so painful. There is nothing worse than writing something from the heart and having someone tear it to shreds maliciously.

Thank you for writing this.

Hugs, Marti

"Even if life is full of thorns,
I still embrace it, for I know
that in between those thorns,
there is a rose worth all the pain."

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15 posted 2002-09-03 11:06 PM


Lyra...Very enjoyable. At first I thought this was about people lashing out in anger at each other saying things they regreted later. Like one time 2 people very close to me were having a falling out and I was trying to be the peace keeper, I told them not to use words as weapons, because they leave scars on the heart that sometime never heal...Thanks for sharing...Paul
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16 posted 2002-09-04 12:58 PM


Thank you so much for sharing this one Lyra. Your heart always beats gently, and with understanding.  Yes, we must all be careful how we use words, for once out there in the open, you can never take them back.
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