the death and burial of an afternoon

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Alicia
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since 2002-03-22

Posts 279

0 posted 2002-06-30 02:42 PM

The honeyed heat of late June
slow bends the stiffness
out of knuckle hinges
and skin
dyeing every pull and throw
onto canvas back or page
straight through
to the naked-white shifts of wind
and the chime song bleeding
red heavy and knowing.
While I salt wash the release
grow carefully
and sick-scream
on the edge of the ending day
with circles in my stomach
and the curl of evening
beating sideways.

cherrypoptart
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since 2002-06-09

Posts 109
state of wordthiness

1 posted 2002-06-30 03:16 PM

Very good writing. Enjoyed.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2002-06-30 05:56 PM

I did the time
in digital
every minute
pounded nail...
and now the evening
is here.
I shovel dirt
to fill the grave.

yer awesome.

Thank you for this.

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-06-30 10:35 PM

I love the way you do this, Alicia.
Sandra

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2002-06-30 10:43 PM

I like the imagery yet question the format whereby you'd like to start a new idea with while...which I would use within a sentence to complete an idea..so I had o read this several times..just a thought

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-07-01 12:37 PM

That's great! By the way, what part of Boston are you from? I'm from New Hampshire, originally.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

6 posted 2002-07-01 12:40 PM

the title itself is magnificent. had to read a few times to take it all in. extraordinary. you should try pepto-bismol (j/k) hehe

Temptress

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since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
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7 posted 2002-07-01 01:59 AM

back to the top with you. I loved this. You get better every time I read.

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2002-07-01 03:01 AM

My God girl, I crave for you.....I really do

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

9 posted 2002-07-01 11:08 AM

really good ppoetry - I enjoyed it so - Paul

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2002-07-01 01:54 PM

you lay the sky on it's side
and show the edges under
between sun and moon

enjoy your art ms

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

11 posted 2002-07-01 04:20 PM

ahh. . . now, this is what poetry should do. . . take the reader along, and challenge what they know. . .

this is what you do, and you do it well. . .

peace you. . .

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Martie

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California

12 posted 2002-07-01 06:32 PM

Alicia

"straight through
to the naked-white shifts of wind
and the chime song bleeding
red heavy and knowing."

This is the way your poetry always feels to me..

Alicia
Member

since 2002-03-22

Posts 279

13 posted 2002-07-06 05:20 PM

~I know I'm a complete stinker for giving one big thank you response to you all, but please know that it's from somewhere deep and that I keep reading what you precious folks have left and I sit here in amazement and warmth. *Peace poet friends, always.

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