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Cypress Haunt (for Marge)
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Cypress Haunt (for Marge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I will take you--meadowland! We shall dance in heel-to-toe. I will take you past badlands where the heather is in growth. I take you, to intensity, in respect of nature's art. I take you to serenity-- we'll dance where graces part in the place where wolves bare teeth-- the place where blood leaks from our meat and muscle is a supper's need-- and all of plans are just a bleed... Let the bog come rolling in. Let the bayou bleat with frog. A colonnade of silken sin-- the decadence of freedom's fog. Lions laugh with devil's wing demons mocking angels sing... Chiseled stone in guard of bone-- refusal of a sin's atone. A clock in time corrects the past-- the dock in rhyme connects the dots. The rhythm of the sea's repast-- a skeleton in reach of "ought." With silken sigh of sail, reposed-- drunken sailor's lie, "who knows?" a half moon of an effigy-- smiling sin of mockery... Statuary--boasting grin as shadows beg the cup 'o gin. A single stark of line on sun-- rebukes the sailor's job...undone. Bats in glee, are thither-there... black-dart jets in bounce of air-- seagulls scream for sweet mercy as sea receives the sun in peace. Watching moss sway from the oak-- visions cast in exhaled smoke, I hear pirates in the swamp-- grateful for the cypress haunt. [This message has been edited by serenity (06-29-2002 03:21 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This may be for Marge but I peeked  and I enjoyed all that I saw! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
y'quick art devil you! *chuckle* I was still editing...but then, sigh..with ME? that's never done...good DAY sunshine! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved everything about this Serenity ... I've got all sorts of images dancing through my mind.  Truly, an excellent read, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
God that's beautiful Celeste! No other word but excellent describes this.......and for another lover of the same! One of your very best I'd say! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You know with a title like that, I'd have t' read. And I like what I found! These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun. |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
"Let the bayou bleat with frog. A colonnade of silken sin-- the decadence of freedom's fog. Lions laugh with devil's wing demons mocking angels sing... Chiseled stone in guard of bone-- refusal of a sin's atone." oh, karen… your tributes to nature are unparalleled. this chants, and writhes, and glorifies… from gleam of teeth, bone and blood, the dance, romance, the hunt and haunt… wondering, do you ever take the time to go back and edit? I ask because this could be epic… ~smile~ and I’d be happy to lend what small help a critique might offer… were the request given. lovely. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
My sister said this would be a good read... she was oh so right.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank ye all...just a meander through the park here, and Miss C? Please feel free. It's all about the learning and I'm always open to new ideas! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ I THOUGHT I heard the Cypress calling ... This is wonderful ... you've got such insight~ The absolute imagery in this - 'Bats in glee, are thither-there... black-dart jets in bounce of air--' blows me away ~ Thank you for thinking o' me~ I think it's just perfectly marvelous~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeez .... GOOD poetry to the top ! Stumper-Da-BUMPER says so ~  ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very good poetry - wonderful images and a wonderful journey - I loved it - Paul |
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