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Life Overtakes Woman
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Life Overtakes Woman |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Life Overtakes Woman Time gathers effortlessly, an invisible sprinter with a cutthroat grin; a rotten trick of age. The race ensues. She prides herself on her pace, and so the scarred knees and eau de chalk marks parfum. Used to be, though, she could see the finish line. Now it’s a mirage leading to false ends. She whispers a secret, a roar of a mantra, running with one prize rolling in her mind. Marathons are mere events to be tallied toward the goal: the sea she remembers. © 2002 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (04-24-2002 11:43 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Oh Corinne, this is so very powerfully said, I think life can indeed be like a marathon, and as long as we train ourselves with trust and a dream close to our hearts, we will achieve that second wind and your life will be greased lightning joy! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Noah, How DO you always post a response so quickly? It always amazes me. Thank you! Cor |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Used to be, though, she could see the finish line. Now it’s a mirage leading to false ends. Both the first verse and this one found instant recognition here. *S* I like this very much, Corinne. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Your symbols have cut the pie neatly, wonderful write. Sy |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Loved "a roar of a mantra" and the ending stanza. Not to mention the rest. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
You will never lose that race, Croinne. You have a timelessnes about you that sinks in. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
She whispers a secret, a roar of a mantra, running with one prize rolling in her mind. your on a roll Corrine, this flows along effortlessly and lands in the soul... Like a red brick, |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
What a most fitting last line... enjoyed this very much! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks everyone, for replying! Corinne |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Corinne, I happen to know that Noah is hardwired into the system. . . it's a part of him. . .  love this one. . . there's a lot of inner thought here. . . you do it so well. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I agree with Sven about Noah.... BTW....how can one lose a race she already has won.... This is a beautiful poem with much meaning within...Very nicely done Corinne... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
we have a tendancy to race the clock, and I can't understand why we are so busy |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ 'the sea she remembers' That thought captures the essence of where the spirit of woman runs~ Love your poetic thoughts ... always~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
you must look harder you must see with desiring you must believe dear |
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