Stylized Sinking (what ship is this?)

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Open Poetry #20

Stylized Sinking (what ship is this?)

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2002-04-23 02:18 PM

"Feel I know you for a while,
when avant-guard lines created style",
drawn in public, veils off faces
etched in stone, time left no traces.

Composed in private, shown on exhibit
oral creases,subjects known to fidget;
seams of pants, sutures of skulls
fiber shreds settled on boat hulls.

waistlines measured by the tailor
special neckines for gallant sailors,
"you doubt I know you for a while,
ocean cruiser, years pass on the dial."

lowcuts, highbrows, gents all around
entertainment, surrounded by ocean sounds
tips of icebergs, new sort of catasrophy
stop short of recollecting, mental atrophy.

grand staircases collapsed on bands of brass
couples cavorted on upper decks,full of sass
front stage held main productions for passenger shows
secluded quarters held private functions a celebrity throws.

"I am the spirit of the deep, and know you awhile
you invaded my sleep as avant-guarde lines became style".

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-23-2002 02:20 PM).]

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2002-04-23 03:56 PM

would be the Titanic..James

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-04-23 05:21 PM

ecrivan,
This write is not for sail, but for engines to reach the wail. Enjoyed

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2002-04-23 07:14 PM

Martin~

"hearts will go on"...: LOL sorry not making light of the poem....its actually very well written....but I remember the song which every FM station played I believe at the same time....any way I ramble....neat write sir....

Lauren~

~Sinking fast into
an ocean of you,
what if I told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2002-04-23 09:14 PM

Right on James, Sy and Lauren,

April 12th marked 90 years since the tragedy
Lauren, I like that melody too!

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