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I Left You There
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I Left You There |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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I left you there alone, afraid Unsure of what to do or say I walked away, I should have stayed If I knew how, another way. A touch of linger on your face A whispered voice to calm the fear A heart on palm did softly trace tissue damping lightly each tear Holding you close, lingering long feeling the shudder and shiver too fragrance remembered, tags along always reminding me of you. Two gold rings touching as hands grasped a bond of love stronger with age Kiss of passion from which we gasped Tender sweet as emotions raged I left a part of me that day upon the corner as you cried Just one more time I couldn’t stay and as I turned, part of me died. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A touch of linger on your face A whispered voice to calm the fear A heart on palm did softly trace tissue damping lightly each tear Magnus - Oh my goodness...this one is simply beautiful! Brought tears to my eyes. Library bound. Thankyou for this. Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
ooops! See now? I got so upset I forgot to click it to my library.  ChrisLife is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
OH Chris....you silly girl....glad you enjoyed it....even if it brought a tear or two... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Holding you close, lingering long feeling the shudder and shiver too fragrance remembered, tags along always reminding me of you. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Beautiful Barry! Would that 'fragrance remembered' happen to be White Shoulders?  ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancyyyyyyy..... You weren't supposed to get it.... YES...White Shoulders....always my favorite. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Magnus Hi there, this is exceptionally fine writing, don’t tell mum I used her favourite expression, but it is utterly utterly excellent. Your lines in this are wonderful, and the words only you can sculpt such divine poetic pieces, which fill the mind with the real feelings of your heart. Very well written. More please   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Krissy.....don'tcha worry...my lips are sealed....I won't tell your Mum....NO WAY! Thank You!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I left you there alone, afraid Unsure of what to do or say I walked away, I should have stayed If I knew how, another way. Though, in a somewhat different scenario, I understand this perfectly. If I knew another way... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is nice...James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Magnus, this is some serious writing my friend... very very good...you write with such emotion, i felt your every line in this! wonderful beautiful work! take care. amy "you can't stop |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh Magnus, this is a sad one. Beauiful as always. But, sad. |
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