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Envy Spiral Shape poem,
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Envy Spiral Shape poem, |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Envy Green with envy? I don’t think so, My words dance Prance in steps of light, running over the pages blue while you are caught in net of rhyme My words shine Slipping over poetic tongue Young breathless vibrant singing swinging, calling Green with envy? Look what I can do too? Green? Greener? Greenest, No jealousy needed I’ve seeded the line just fine. Take back the lie you sigh, I’m flying way up high Who’s green now Krissy I think mum you’ll find that I’m catching up with you fast. Look to your laurels mum, I think they would look fabulous on me. Don’t get too complacent mummy dearest And while thy willing soul transpiers at every pore with instant fires Andrew Marvell 1621-1678 [This message has been edited by Krissy (04-19-2002 07:52 AM).] |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Interestingly done, Krissy. I don't see a spiral, but this was well written. Watch out, Marsha! lol  ~sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I see the spiral....and Mom better watch out. Nice Job Krissy!! |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
i see the spiral too! this is so neat, i think one day I'll make an attempt at a shape poem!  xcellent work sweetie |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Oh never mind, there it is. Guess I was just having a blond moment lol. Anyway, once again, nice work Krissy. ~sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The world should stop and rest awhile to watch both of you compete! For all you do is cast some smiles while each other lays the heat! There will never be a tomorrow here that one doesn't come to test the other's merit and sound words to see just who is best! So poet on my poet friends rhyme and circle the sounds! The winner is Passion's at its end 'cause we got the best in town! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-19-2002 01:21 PM).] |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Krissy, this is wonderful. Gosh you girls are both fantastic. I agree, though, Your mum had better stay alert. LOL... ((Krissy)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles in delight) Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, sweet friend, ooohhhhhh...we'll have to see how much your mom blushed reading this poem, this too is good just like hers is! (kiss on cheek) You have such amazing talent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krissy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Well, darn! When will I ever remember to take these silly green contacts out before I try to read a green sentence!!! Now I see it, and well...sorry, between you and your mum...I just can't decide who I am more envious of! *LOL* I'd say it was a tie fer sure...  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...I'm not even going to try and judge. Wouldn't be fair! Nope..no way! This is sooo cool Krissy! Love it sweetie! ~Hugs~ |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Very clever. A great use of a computer resource not often resorted to to create some format contribution to a poem. Congrats! Bart |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSweetKrissy~ You took the 'title inspire' right to the edge of beauty~ Leaving me AND your Mum green with envy~ I love it ... positively LOVE IT ~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Krissy - love your writings. I believe you're really teaching mumsie... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Krissy the competition's fierce and strong you both make us so proud and I know it won't be long before we say out loud you both are dear to us we love the way that you compete but don't you worry don't you fuss together you're complete the yin and yang of what you do complements the other dear and we know before you're through we'll be the winners here. play along enjoy the game but don't forget it shows the love you bear will be quite tame if competition goes. Well done I am green with envy. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so very well done, Krissy... You have certainly come a very long way in a very short time. I am envious of your talent! ~hugs of green envy~copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Krissy, So whose crib notes were those? LOL See I knew you could figure this out for yourself! Well done. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very neat! i still dont understand how to do all those cool beans effects! lol great poem miss krissy hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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