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Not worth the candle (reply to a VAS challenge waaaaay long back!)
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Not worth the candle (reply to a VAS challenge waaaaay long back!) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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You're not worth the candle. Not worth its wick. Not worth its smoke. Not worth wax stick. You're not worth the sunsets. Not worth gold coasts. Not worth green treelines. Not worth rained roads. You're not worth the quiet. Not worth snow dark. Not worth this shiver. You're not worth my heart. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well that's quite the A...kicking piece of poetry.....It's probably so very true. I enjoyed so many of the lines....snow dark....that's good! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you. It's not so much that I'm in a negative mood as much as the challenge -- to incorporate "Not worth the candle" in the poem -- is implicitly a negative phrase. So I went off with that. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Wow, I can feel such frustration and seriousness in these words, sweet friend, I too got that same impression that you are not necessarily in a bad mood right now but just this is a negative reaction many can relate to! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mike, I remember this challenge, I did one too. I loved the feel of this, it breaks the heart completely...one of your best my dear... ppsst.... /pip/Forum50/HTML/000802.html should you care to take a gander.... [This message has been edited by SEA (05-03-2002 10:27 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
this is very notworthy  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you all enjoyed. Not! (hmm... that attempt at humor proved something to me: 'deer I most definitely ain't!) Oh, and SEA -- I replied, trumpets blazing. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-06-2002 01:34 PM).] |
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