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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
shredding slivers of glass into barnacles for the pier above my moustache does not mean Ive gone fishing for answers quite the opposite Im in need of a swifter pen and longer sheets of paper I am not particularly proud of my marital commitments to a silent ghost but sharing the same bed with one will usually keep you far from it long after midnight applying stain to partical board doesnt bring it any closer to being oak and such is the case when covetting someones love it doesnt always mean you'll be taken by the hand and led to salvation it doesnt even mean youll be taken seriously when the casting call finally comes |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Yep...I'm studying you. I'm curious about how you decide where your line breaks will be...or is it just an instinctive thing? and yep. Yer good.  |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
The lines breaks are instinctive, based on years of mistakes, sometimes I go back and fix older works that left me dumbfounded forever but for some reason now become clear immeadiatly. Does this mean Im developing? LOL. The Blue Panda peice is old and I had to make some changes, the ending especially was in need of work. some peopel think its like sacrillage to change an old poem, I could never figure out why.. Steven |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
applying stain to partical board doesnt bring it any closer to being oak **** I'm not sure it's legal for anyone to get this profound. I'm keeping this one. And I enjoyed the comments about your update on the pandas. You change with time, why not your words? |
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