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A sky beyond description (VAS's Challenge poem)
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A sky beyond description (VAS's Challenge poem) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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clouds drifted winds rustled through the sky rain was falling the trees wispered the same lie let it rain, they cried, the sun was fading away, and the sky stood still, And begged the sun to stay This challenge forbade the use of adjetives. (shudders) the Wind is invisible. remeber me [This message has been edited by Wind (03-03-2003 06:28 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is really good. I enjoyed it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This is truly beautiful, and from what I can see, it is a challenge well met! Have a wonderful evening! EA |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Great job, Wind. Writing without adjectives does seem like a daunting (oops) challenge. You've met the challenge well. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well done Wind!! Enjoyed. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Absolutely FANTASTIC!!! Barring adjectives didn't bar your descriptiveness one iota! Excellent!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks everyone the Wind is invisible. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Well done! Shamed me in my inadequacy - and rightly so! Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Loved this and love the new pic lol |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You did good Windy woman, the trees are shady indeed! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
wow! I thought this was really good.. and then I read the challenge and now I think its even better! As long as you don't inclue articles as adjectives. That'd be impossible, though I'd have thought this would be anyway. Like I said, WOW! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Liz, this is good and very descriptive even without adjectives. I'm going to read the challenge.....if I can find it. BTW, I like your new picture...  Hugs, Ethel |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 Challenge met head on, and quite a wonderful poem! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just awesome! well done! |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
nice reading >>phantom poet<< |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
Good job! I especially like the title, in connection to the challenge itself (not being able to describe the sky, with adjectives at least.) I also like the line "The trees whisper the same lie."  That's what we, as heroes, do. We live as if the world were like it should be, to show the world what it could be. |
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