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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-02-26 10:58 AM

The wind does rage,
Rattling panes that leak
Veining tendrils of cold
To threaten tenuous warmth.

Wrapping closer still
The blanket of your memory
Round an older
Perhaps wiser heart
I watch the flicker of shadow
Knowing even flames fed well
Can be extinguished.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2002-02-26 11:05 AM

See...this is what you do so well with "so little" ... you made us feel the cold with your imagery...then let us warm for a moment in the emotions...and the let the chill come back in with those last lines of poetic impact.
I dont see "cliche" I see succinct successfull poetry done Capt style

"Never made it as a wise man
couldn't cut it as a poor man stealin
Tired of livin like a blind man
sick of sight without a sense of feelin"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2002-02-26 11:07 AM

Thank you Janet...you do say the nicest things... and they are much appreciated.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-02-26 11:10 AM

wrap the warp of sweater's weave
negate the cold of winter's leave
for soon the spring shall be a whim
and fancy! Love, shall spring again

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-02-26 11:17 AM

nice reply Sunshine... thanks for taking the time and for the thouhts..

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2002-02-26 11:28 AM

I watch the flicker of shadow
Knowing even flames fed well
Can be extinguished.

Well done indeed!! Enjoyed this. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2002-02-26 11:34 AM

Chris: Thank you! It is always a pleasure for a poet to know others enjoy or like the things shared! You kind words are appreciated.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2002-02-26 12:55 PM

There is so much hope written in these words.
I especially liked what you said about a wiser heart!
Good things happen to good people and there is always
the blanket of memories to keep us warm.

Really nice poem!

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-26-2002 12:56 PM).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2002-02-26 01:24 PM

Serenade: Indeed...it is a serenade to read replies such as yours. Thank You

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

9 posted 2002-02-26 02:49 PM

Warmth, though tenuous, still draws our hands. Well said. Bob

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