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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nay! Those places dark That lie between the words I will not visit on this day Of cold and angry wind. My cloak will not stay the edge Of icy touch on heart My heart will not beat again To those ancient drums Nay! The voids filled with demons Do not lure me into lairs of old For I am scarred now from times before And cutting swipes not parried My dagger sheathed will stay No slaying of fey spirits will it do Too brittle of spirit for this It must be sent to smith for tempering Nay! You would not like those voids Nor find respite in them from day to day So sit and stay, this cup we’ll share Tomorrow The demons will still Be there |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
An interesting write, hope you don't mind a bit of redirrection, using yours as inspiration. Avo)I(dance will be my poem Gloom |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
feel free! This is a ramble of thought..and a ramble only...that could be tightened up and made better with a rewrite or two... always interesting to see what transpires from the thoughts shared in such a ramble... |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Darkness lies between all lines But come each morn the light reigns in. I've seen it all before this day and you shall too, in smile of wind. Dear Sir, the edge is mine beheld ragged, cuts unhealed of heart. Unless of course those drums that beat the silence into demons' start. I cloak my words in warmth for you Nay on nays, voids emptied too Unsheath your sword, release your ill For I am "child of" moonlights will. ~A~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Alice: I fear I hold no chance of poetic replies with one of your talent...so I will not attempt one here. I will say intriguing indeed are words and the things that lie behind them, and shared meanings as well as pasts are always welcomed understandings. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Vnadana: Thank you! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat A very interesting read..much enjoyed. Made me look out of the corner of my eye to see if avoidance waits for me. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks Martie... a ramble of sorts is all... something that popped into head and made itself be written. Your kind words are always apprecated. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, this may be a ramble, but it sure is good. And very intriguing to think over. Sandra |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sandra: You are kind... thank you. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And you, m'friend, are very adept at reading between lines. But Nay, it doesn't bother me...as I was BORN nekked!  with grins, m'friend! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like the thought of this one Sir. . . it flows very well into the mind of the reader. . . well done. . . and a unique title. . . makes one think about the placement of the (). . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Serenity: ;> we are all born naked... it is the hiding between the being born and the being buried we find filled with those dreaded monsters.  Sven: Thank you Kind Sir for the comment and thoughts. Yes the placement is key to the title...or was intended to be. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Great write!!!! off to see what Gloom has come up with : ) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
More... please... |
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