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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-03-05 10:46 AM

The faithful formed two Sunday
lines on the cement crust,
outside the blue corrugated
building, on the wind whipt
isolated prairie, on the
coldest day in memory.

The flagless pole beaten
by a violent rippling cord
whose pinging staccato lashed
in unholy frenzy, defying
stinging ears to keep pace.

Faces whose pores closed
ranks in a reddening mask
so petrified in numbness
that once sheltered display
comical winks and blinked
twitchings like frogs
unfrozen in spring.

The "regular" line entering
to fill booths, clutch phones
and peer through plexiglass.
We, the first dozen "contacts"
passed the detectors on wooden
legs covered by jeans which
warmed long before the
underlying flesh.

This jail's a crudely peeled
sardine can whose sharp edges
dare those who'd reach in them
from getting too generous lest
some bloodletting cause a part
of you to remain there.

Jacqueline walks out in ten
days and my weary long reach
which has held her even wearier
head above drowning will shorten
to a side by side and lawful
ride home.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

[This message has been edited by RSWells (03-05-2002 10:49 AM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-03-05 10:49 AM

Not where I imagined this would take me, but better yet...to a sense of overdue hope...

I wish you both well...

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-03-05 10:53 AM

Your words made me shiver..not a pretty picture, but painted so well with stark reality. Going home, Im sure, has never looked so good.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-03-05 10:54 AM

Jacqueline walks out in ten
days and my weary long reach
which has held her even wearier
head above drowning will shorten
to a side by side and lawful
ride home.
======================================

Your constance for her is as impressive as your imagery.
The wounded bird is now able to "try to again fly"
Heres to new beginings ....I wish her all the best...shes lucky to have you in her corner.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-03-05 11:44 AM

This jail's a crudely peeled
sardine can whose sharp edges
dare those who'd reach in them
from getting too generous lest
some bloodletting cause a part
of you to remain there.

great imagery here and a story telling I have come to greatly appreciate...

good will and luck to all...

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-03-05 06:57 PM

Rest knowing you have held her in your keep with your heart all this time, and now it is her turn to find her place in life. I wish her all the best Richard, and I truly hope she makes it! To Jackie!

~* Without deep reflection one knows from daily life that one exists for other people ." *~

Einstein

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

6 posted 2002-03-05 07:03 PM

I could hear that flag beating against the pole. this was chilling RS, I do wish the very best to you and to her. great awesome write. as usual. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-03-05 07:23 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Richard, this one tugged at my heartstrings, this is sad but I have faith and hope that you will find her and you will reunite and offer her hope and all her heart needs to hold on with a smile! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much, my thoughts are with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2002-03-05 07:55 PM

Your imagery here is right on...I could feel the cold, hear the wind. I hope there are better, warmer times ahead for both of you.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-03-05 08:46 PM

Reading this the word 'home' took on a much warmer, comforting, and whole new meaning.
Well done Richard and I wish you both all the best.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2002-03-05 09:08 PM

Good news, Richard. And may all your future 'visits' be up close and personal, touch-to-touch. Big warm hugs to you, the lady, and the waif.

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