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Open Poetry #19

Belated Valentine's Day

Streen
Member

since 2001-11-28

Posts 169

0 posted 2002-03-02 08:43 PM

With these words I now employ,
A futile attempt of mine,
Though I am known as slightly coy,
I humbly seek thee-- a Valentine.

Told by some I must regale
With words so sweet and phrases,
With my speech high castles scale,
To paint thee as quaint daisies.

So here I go since I've been told,
That there is quite no other way,
Though I be timid I may be bold,
And hope my words thee sway.

Your locks of hair are flowing light,
Upon these restful flowers.
Your beauty- am I regaleing right?-
Atop the roof of heaven towers.

And your toes, your tiny toes,
Wiggle softly by the grassy mold,
Sprouting quickly, tho' as a rose.
(I am performing, you must behold!)

Thy hopeful eyes- a peaceful well
Into which I loose a stone,
And fall straight to- can thee tell
If with these words I merely drone?

I rather wish to well thee praise,
To sing to all your glory,
truth be told, I thee do raise,
As leaves uncurl- a flower hoary.

O Heather, if this is rhyming rightly,
And if I've let thy beauty shine,
Please give consent to kiss me lightly,
And hold my hand-- my Valentine.

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Meter is the most God-awful poetic device to me.

Even with this poem, I'm sure some parts are rough on meter.

-Derek

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-03-02 08:55 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, I think the meter is fine, sweet friend, such love shines from your heart in this wonderful poem! (big hugggsssss) May you forever hold your valentine close and find true happiness together forever, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Derek, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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