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Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

0 posted 2002-02-27 01:51 PM

Deceit smothered
love's flames
forcing her to
wander alone
in the cold and damp
scarlet wasteland
of broken hearts.
Unable to stop
the stinging tears
which spilled like
diamonds from a
jewelry box
of memories
within her tortured mind,
She numbly watched
as devotion pooled
around her feet
in an abstract puddle
of liquified, shattered
dreams.
Wallowing in this
self-made mire,
she prayed for
saving grace,
and was handed
back
her
pride.

                                       Chris Barker
                                          Feb.2002

[This message has been edited by Nightshade (02-27-2002 01:52 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-02-27 01:59 PM

(smiles) Ooohhhhhhh...this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always touch my heart and inspire me! (kiss on cheek) may the beauty of true love forever shine in her heart now, sweet friend, we all love you so much, I love your new picture!!!

You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Magicmystery
Senior Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2002-02-27 02:23 PM

This is such a sad poem with so happy an ending.... I loved the way you painted this picture.... I could see the dark skies swirling above you and just as it became the darkest.... Grace!!! but was it your pride that you needed....... Yes.... just thinking out loud..... I still wouldn't mind meeting the dude who did that to you in a dark alley.... he's have a little less .... Pride.
Wonderful write.

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-02-27 02:30 PM

Unable to stop
the stinging tears
which spilled like
diamonds from a
jewelry box
of memories
within her tortured mind,
==============================

this is a impactful and aching image...
powerful emotive piece Chris....I see your moody muse has returned

good to see you posting again girlie

"Never made it as a wise man
couldn't cut it as a poor man stealin
Tired of livin like a blind man
sick of sight without a sense of feelin"

Dulcinea
Senior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 774
IN

4 posted 2002-02-27 02:34 PM

Excellent write Nightshade! You described those feelings perfectly. The imagery was right on target! Well done!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2002-02-27 02:39 PM

a wonderful thing to be handed back to you...

very nicely done!

Nightshade

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Posts 13962
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6 posted 2002-02-27 02:44 PM

Noah - Thanks sweetie, you always take the time to read and sign. hugs!

Magicmystery - I love happy ending too. Thanks so much.

JanetMarie- Thanks so much for your response. Yes, my muse has returned, but with a grimace and a grumble. Vacation must have been over too soon.

Dulcinea - thankyou for reading

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Nightshade

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Posts 13962
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7 posted 2002-02-27 02:47 PM

Cpat Hair - how nice of you to stop by.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2002-02-27 02:54 PM

Chris

Sometimes it is at the bottom where we can most appreciate what is at the top. Very emotive and well done poem!

Nightshade

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9 posted 2002-02-27 02:57 PM

Hi Martie!! Your comments are always appreciated. hugs!

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

10 posted 2002-02-27 04:05 PM

Ah Chris, this one comes from someplace deep inside...a distant memory perhaps, long gone now. Very well done and so full of emotion. Excellent write!
~Hugs and luv ya! Teed~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Nightshade

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Posts 13962
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11 posted 2002-02-27 04:10 PM

Enchantress - dear sister you know me too well. hugs to you too.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

12 posted 2002-02-27 05:41 PM

Although I have written poems of wars in foreign lands.This poem reminds me that the nearest battle ground can be your heart.I award you the Order of the broken heart with a "V" for valor.

paladin

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

13 posted 2002-02-27 06:52 PM

"which spilled like
diamonds from a
jewelry box
of memories"
this is awesome, lovely words put together to form a lovely poem. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
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14 posted 2002-02-27 06:59 PM

paladin - yes, as the song from the 80's said, "Love is a Battlefield" thankyou sir.

Floria - thankyou sweet lady.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Chrissypooh
Member

since 2002-02-19

Posts 80
Canada

15 posted 2002-02-27 09:41 PM

~Chris very sweet I like it

~
christine

Nightshade

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16 posted 2002-02-27 09:44 PM

Christine, Hello!! Thanks for stopping by and reading and commenting.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

17 posted 2002-02-27 09:45 PM

"She numbly watched
as devotion pooled
around her feet
in an abstract puddle
of liquified, shattered
dreams"

wow....this is such an incredible write....
you rock....this is packed with emotions....I love this

Nightshade

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Posts 13962
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18 posted 2002-02-27 09:49 PM

SEA - you must have commented while I was thanking Christine. I am so glad you enjoyed this.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

19 posted 2002-02-28 01:45 AM

Chris - keep these writings coming. They are suberb, and written from the heart...

BC

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
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20 posted 2002-02-28 09:07 AM

Bill - thankyou for telling me to "go for it" and thankyou for reading this.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

gladiator
Junior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 10

21 posted 2002-02-28 03:40 PM

Chris...what a beautiful poem..a real loving story..you have real style..hope to see many more ...

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

22 posted 2002-02-28 04:37 PM

BRAVA!
AUTHOR!
This is sensational!
Welcome all the way back

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
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23 posted 2002-02-28 04:40 PM

gladiator - thankyou for stopping by.

Interloper - Thankyou dear Poet!!

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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