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Balladeersong
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Balladeersong |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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Why can't I write a sonnet like you did and let the words flow softly into rhyme To write da-Dums with words that truly fit I tried but sure it must be the wrong time They say to look at you sweet Balladeer At least to sonnets that you wrote before Lost in your stories is what happens here Cause when I read I look at rhyme no more So I will give this sonnet one more try I hope I did not make a too big mess At last I'm glad you did not hear me sigh But then it is our fate to sigh I guess I name this sonnet my Balladeersong It is my first but it won't be for long A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Bravo, Titia, I find sonnets impossible to write...Poetic discipline and I are enemies, thus free verse and haiku are my joy! this is very well done...Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Beautifully written.  -Silver Streak. Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Titia, this is wonderfully done! I have a very hard time writing a sonnet or trying to get words to rhyme. Give me free verse, anytime. Oh, I think I just made a rhyme...perhaps I shall try to pen a poem sublime! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've heard tell, he can do it all...but that could be rumor... Good job Titia. You have the winning spirit, because you always try, and most often, succeed quite well... Kudos! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I love sonnets and though I try my hand at them from time to time...I can just never get them to flow quite right...This is a wonderful sonnet and our Balladeer will surely love it. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, I love it! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Imitating the master and then naming it after him is the sincerest form of flattery. I'm sure Balladeer will be flattered. As for the sonnet? I really hope you write more..I think you've got it!! Good job Titia!  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 YAY!!! Beautiful sonnet, sweet friend, I love it!!! (kiss on cheek) You write sonnets soooooo beautifully too, I just know Balladeer will love this! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, your words are fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Titia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Ellie, now I've got the hang of it a bit, I think I like writing sonnets. Silver Streak, thanks Nancy, you go girl, rhyme away, thanks Sunshine, I told you I'm a fighter, like a bulldog I won't let go Startime, you should hear me shouting da Dum da Dum da Dum da Dum da Dum out loud here all the time  Kathleen, thanks sweetie Poet deVine, you got me there  Noah, it's a beginning, more to come I'm sure Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hey Titia! I think you've done real good here. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Titia....I am IMPRESSED!!! This is nothing like the one you posted before. Your syllable count is exact and, with one tiny exception, your iambic rythym is flawless! Believe me, you didn't just sit and write this down. You studied and worked very hard on the construction in an obvious determination to make it right....and you did an excellent job. I applaud you, dear lady!!  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Smartchick, thank you Balladeer, A+??? WOW. I think the tiny exeption you mentioned is in the two last lines? When I read them over again, I stumble a bit over those lines, am I right? It's fun to do but my hubby went crazy hearing all those da Dums I like doing them though so you'll see more I'm sure Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Titia, much tighter, I can feel its rhythm and flow, I can't do this type my syllables are all stressed you know. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Lovely sonnet from you talented poet. much enjoyed.... and a great tribute too. Thank you for sharing. Regards, Olias. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ You do everything so well ! This is wonderful ! Love to you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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