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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
In its chill the wind touched the recesses of shelter abandoned with summer's sun Colder days lie ahead the warmth of innocent times now a memory that like moonbeams can only dance between the leaves not yet fallen Life changes color brief existences shine Then, exhausted, drop to ground Caught in obstacles As they are blown Wrap around you now The dark cloak saved for funerals And mourn the passing Of so many bright days |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
So deeply and quietly sad...... You have expressed it in such a nice touching way..... Thank you ************************ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, this is so sad...... Fall is a happy time...... hugs to you  |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
So well this is placed, given the season and the change it brings, that one can only embrace it, to know that Summer is past, only to come, soon again, upon Spring's heal.... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
If fall could remain - and refuse to give way to the long cold winter ahead, it'd be even lovelier... Short of that, it's an awesome season...Well written, indeed, Cpat... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair, Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In its chill the wind touched the recesses of shelter abandoned with summer's sun Colder days lie ahead the warmth of innocent times now a memory that like moonbeams can only dance between the leaves not yet fallen =============================== Oh I like this...and this likes me.... right into my library... this is a very clever write of imagery and metaphor... we are indeed going into this fall in mourning..and the chill of winter came early, ushered in by loss.... forgive if I have misinterped..but I see you making clever analogies to the incoming season and the tradgedies reaches still settling in on us. excellent write Cp jm Well tomorrow holds only mystery |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
I wish I could write poetry like this (And I wish I could understand it like JanetMarie ) Even simply understood, it was a very nice poem, a good tribute to my favorite season. I enjoyed this, thanks |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
I've learned to expect excellence from your poems. This melancholy truth is beautiful. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Cpat Hair....this is an exquisite write about autumn. Also, my favourite season. I enjoyed this so much! Thank you! Nancy. ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat--Thoughtful litany to the end of innocence, and coming of change...very well done! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nice, takes many meanings.. Sandra |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I mourn the passing of a season only because they are numbered. Bring on the cool and color of fall and the democratic chill of winter to force us before a reflective fire. Summer is for the young of whose number I no longer count myself. Enjoyed |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
For some reason I had been looking forward to winter this year, now it already seems too cool for the autumn and I wonder if the freeze will be the renewal I had thought. Enjoyed your poem, as always. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
*sigh* why does it have to end Ron? Why? Summer is so lovely and Fall's not so bad either but then comes the chilly Winter....can't it just stay in it's little closet somewhere and only come out for Christmas? This was a lovely poem and I can relate to it for sure....I've got my cloak in hand! Hugs, ~Krista  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ 'the warmth of innocent times now a memory that like moonbeams can only dance between the leaves not yet fallen' I looked no deeper than the beauty I visioned in this read~ Thank you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Love the last stanza.... ~Connie~ |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is also very good. I wish I could write this good. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
You embrace autumn with such grace and clarity. It's as if you are the leaves, and the changes, and the cool night. You do this very well! Sincerely, Regina |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I am already mourning the passing of summer. I'm FREEZING. I had to turn the heating on it's so cold.  Lovely write though If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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