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I Die |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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I Die Doves of angels, innocently sing aside chapel bells in heavenly ring flutterwings grace daisies of halo hue still, my heart chokes on regret's residue, eternal love, unattainble, blooms in Venus mist roses of false promise smash by fury's fist, there is no glory, no freedom to be found pained by the pendulum, at dark's mercy - I'm bound, nothing to strive for, lost in decayed days woe plunders soul, trapped in madness maze, tormented, molested, peace eludes my brow yearning for reaper's release, for death, I bow, stars sway in shine sailing comet high yet, my world has no meaning...inside I die shallow tears trace a blank canvas of life hopechest is vacant, corrupted by strife, screaming in solitude, mourning misery for little girl fantasies refusing to be, memories they fade, though scars remain time groans on for inescapable strain drops of drudgery, body bleeds dry withering worthless...inside I die By Melissa P. Monette [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 07-16-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, Melissa, writing makes you free, a poet is never bound dear one.... "It's easier to kill love than to nurture it" Fred Hardesty |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
To write is healing, and so is forgiving, for once you forgive, you start to forget, and a new day dawns. Nicely written. ~If you have a choice to sit down or dance, I hope that you dance~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
to mourn is to heal and I believe this poem has begin the healing of the pain/hurt |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
screaming in solitude, mourning misery for little girl fantasies refusing to be, memories they fade, though scars remain time groans on for inescapable strain drops of drudgery, body bleeds dry withering worthless...inside I die ================================ Melis you can write dark and make it bleed... this is wrenching and impactuous.... you have captured depression and the listless, hopeless, complacentcy that comes with it to a T. vivid stark and powerful write take care of you sweet poet jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
To write with such passion indicates a true feeling of inner turmoil. The pen allows your inner child to come out and scream with much anguish. Allow this child to release the abuse aflicted long ago..... Speculating, but, one can only pen this well when one has felt the pain.  I embrace, a touching, well written piece. Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
powerful writing... the anguish and torment..the search for internal peace...all tied together very well... don't let your words die.. I enjoy them too much! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You have polished a gem of sadness. To be only worn on ocassion. Excellent write. Sy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Melissa, no one can bring out these feelings of passion and dark desire like you can. . . it's like you speak to them daily. . . sometimes, my friend. . . I wish that you wouldn't. . . but this is excellent writing. . . from your soul. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you everyone for your understanding and encouragement  But, this had to be written~ |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Melissa, Beautiful but so dark. I love your poetry. You express your pain so well, which is good for healing. I just wish you a beautiful soul like yours didn't have so much to share  ~hugs to you~ TaraB [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 07-17-2001).] |
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