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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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I have a favor to ask you, would you do something for me? Would you help me with a task, that lies ahead of me? Would you go with me to the cemetary, to put flowers on her grave? To say goodbye to her again? To try and let go of the pain? I have a favor to ask you, would you hug me if I cry? Even if you don't understand, my reason for crying, would you still hug me, and tell me that everything's alright? Would you go with me to the cemetary, or would you be to busy to care? I have a favor to ask you, would you help me let go? Would you make me strong again? Would you try and help at all? Would you try and take my pain, make it your own and understand, instead of just pushing me away? I'm just asking.  Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
oh sis! i feel for you *hugz* id go with you but i dont know exactly where you live...just somewhere in ohio.. "I have no never-again, I have no always" |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I like this one. It's sad though. The last line was really good. I liked it Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Allysa.. *hug* Who could ever say no to that plea? I hope that things work out. This must be a very hard time of year for you. I hope that you have someone there with you when you go. No one should ever have to do something like that by themselves. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Yes, Allysa- I will go.  HeHe...Okay- Seriously now. (Since this is a serious poem.) I thought you did a splendid job. I'm here for ya if you need me...Just send an e-mail. Hard times always calls for a shoulder to lean on. Hope things get better even if it's just the tiniest bit. Thanks for the read. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww this was so cute. k cute was a bad word, it was just so nice and neat and flowed perfectly. great job, its tough going to the cemetary, i have to go every once in awhile *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one allysa. Well done here. I love your little angel smilie at the end haha. Always makes me go "awwww". Anyhow....nice poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Would you try and take my pain, make it your own and understand, instead of just pushing me away? this is soooooooo sad allysa! *hugs*...i enjoyed this one lots. i think you did a very good job of expressing yourself and getting your point across. keep posting! S |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awwww, how can anyone say no to that?! You did very well here. I hope all is well. Jenn "...and this is how you remind me, of what I really am..." |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
I think I speak for everyone here, when I say...We're all here for you! Through thick and thin, no matter what! You ask and we do! That's us...the PIP Family! |
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