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Love you My Angel |
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FoxXena Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted |
What I saw when I first saw you, is VERY hard to describe, but you looked back and saw me too, and what sparked there, I shall not forget. You are my angel, from heaven above, you're an ethereal, unworldly being, I cannot, will not believe what I'm seeing, I am unworthy of you. But I'll never forget, the day that we met. From there on, our destiny was set. I love you. ~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~ ~*~I say it is the written word.~*~ [This message has been edited by FoxXena (edited 06-28-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
aw this is so sweet...  the first ive read from you but its great nonetheless!!!!!!...keep sharing....cuz i enjoyed it a lot! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is so sweet. I know those feelings all too well.. unfortunately, heartbreak was accomanied with mine. I hope that's not the case for you. The meter throughout this poem was very sporadic. That might be because the rhyme scheme was altered as well. It left, and then came back in a completely different pattern. That can be easily fixed, though. I really did enjoy this. The thoughts behind the poem are beautiful. I wish you the best of luck with the situation. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem is sweet I can relate to it but like Marie mine ended with my heart being broken but I'm over it.ut this was a great poem. LAuren |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sweet...the ending was great!...i enjoyed it a lot...bye..  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Nice...Whoever it is for should be happy. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Aww this is so sweet, I love happy poems keep them coming. until your next poem-- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is wonderful |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this a lot. Sounds a lot how I used to sound with a girl. You're putting this guy on a pedastal (sp?) and that's ok. It happens hehe  Well I wish you the best of luck with him.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
This was incredibly sweet. Keep posting. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
awwwwwww, how sweet!!!!! thanks for sharing that! I love that! -->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very sweet and romantic poem FoxXena. The type of poem I'd like for someone to write for me. *sigh* Oh well, keep it up keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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