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Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-08-06 08:59 AM

I saw you standing in the driveway
To this over crowded party.
First I thought I was dreaming
But than, I got this feeling.

You with your blue eyes.
You with your blond hair.
You with your cute smile.
You with everything I like.

You walked up and asked me so kindly
With a tender voice oh so sweet.
If I could see if I knew
But I, did not have a clue.

You with your blue eyes.
You with your blond hair.
You with your cute smile.
You with everything I like.

I wonder how I didn’t notice you
Why I didn’t raged nice you
But all this time,
I had the feeling I knew you.
So well.

You with your blue eyes.
You with your blond hair.
You with your cute smile.
You with everything I like.

I saw you standing in the driveway
To this over crowded party.
First I thought I was dreaming
But than, I got this feeling.

You with your blue eyes.
You with your blond hair.
You with your cute smile.
You with everything I like.

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-08-06 03:47 PM

That is very sweet. It's crazy when you notice something like that about someone you have known. You kick yourself for not having seen it earlier. Nice job on the poem.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

2 posted 2001-08-07 04:14 AM

this is cool. aren't you glad you've noticed them now. I know a few who i wish would notice me.

katie

"by takeing no risks you are really risking everything"
Vic's RE book

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-08-08 01:26 AM

Thought this was a sweet one. You seem to write a lot about a girl and love and such.....is there a special someone you write these for? Anyway, i liked this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-08-08 02:14 AM

Nicely written song, Hallu! I really enjoyed this one... I liked the chorus. Well done.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

5 posted 2001-08-08 02:48 AM

awwwwwww somes in love! javi we need to sing the song lol *sings* love is in the air ........
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

6 posted 2001-08-08 03:57 AM

*o0O0Oo0oO*
That is so sweet!!

God i love meeting someone *or noticing someone* who you really love...

Congratualtions on the person... and the poem...

ALLIE

sean mani
Junior Member

since 2001-08-06

Posts 27

7 posted 2001-08-09 02:41 PM

i wish i was noticed sometimes...

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nicely written...check out my poem 'september 29' and 'revelation to december'

sean

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

8 posted 2001-08-10 02:27 PM

This was awesome, i completly loved this. great job on this.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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