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Scream your name
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Scream your name |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Why do you linger in the air around me? And force me to hear your voice. Why can I hear you call to me? When I know you’re miles away. Why does the moon scream your name? And why do the stars not ask it to stop? Why are there only five senses? When your memory could occupy nine. What’s wrong with me? That makes me think I have a chance. When I washed up your emotions, Then hung them out to dry. And why did you not warn me? That he’d be the thing I needed most. Or why did I not listen? Where do I move on? Watch me from wherever, Watch me feel the pain. That lingers in the air day and night, Hear me scream your name. |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
Oh wow.. this is very heartfelt... Great poem!  I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
JAVIER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ...erm ok. Anyhow, I liked the poem. Well done here. I felt it hard.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I loved this. "Why does the moon scream your name? And why do the stars not ask it to stop?" A wonderful write her. You did a great job. More I say!  |
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Neveah New Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 5 |
Awesome poem! That was a very strong poem!!! I felt that one!! Hope to see more from you!!! Make sure you always have that strong love in your poetry, it makes it good!!!! |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
This was truly wonderful...such heartfelt emotions expressed. This one hit home with me and sometimes its hard to keep your strength up. Good luck to ya..and hope to see more from ya! ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Im with spice those lines rocked! nice job here |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Awesome poem here!!  |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
aye, i lyked this. the ending was really kool. i can't think of any advice to give you other then keep it up :-) good work, YAY!! -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
strongly said...and quite hearfelt...i liked it. "if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry- |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Thankyou so much, you must be the most welcoming people i've ever spoken too... even though im a million miles away from most of you.. thankyou so much... im so gald ive met a bunch of great people who share my love for poetry!! ALLIE |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Great poem, very nicely done here. Here me scream your name. That is a great last line for this poem, or icing on the cake if you will. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very strong poem! I really liked this. I hope to see mroe soon. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
this was a good poem.  i love that lil bouncy thing lol |
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