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Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-07-14 12:24 PM

As the night turns into day
And the dark hours flouts away
You’re all I think about.
As my tears roll slowly down
And spells your name on the ground
With the tenderness of love.

It feels like heaven,
When you’re by my side,
No matter what you’re,
My angel in disguise.
Girl when you smile,
It makes me wanna cry.
Your beautiful eyes,
Are shaped like roses.

Girl you’re my pretty sunrise
You’re eyes are my paradise
A picture in my mind.
I felt my heart beat so true
For the first time I saw you
I knew you where the one.

It feels like heaven,
When you’re by my side,
No matter what you’re,
My angel in disguise.
Girl when you smile,
It makes me wanna cry.
Your beautiful eyes,
Are shaped like roses.

You’re,
(You’re beautiful,)
Beautiful in the rain.
( 3x )

It feels like heaven,
When you’re by my side,
No matter what you’re,
My angel in disguise.
Girl when you smile,
It makes me wanna cry.
Your beautiful eyes,
Are shaped like roses.

It feels like heaven, ( you’re )
When you’re by my side, ( you’re beautiful )
No matter what you’re, ( beautiful in the rain. )
My angel in disguise.
Girl when you smile, ( you’re )
It makes me wanna cry. ( you’re beautiful )
Your beautiful eyes, ( beautiful in the rain. )
Are shaped like roses.

Shaped like Roses...

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

1 posted 2001-07-14 12:49 PM

OMG oh my FREAKING god!!!! this is sooooooooooo good!!! i love everything about it. the rhyming, the repitition (just right, not too much or too little) everything!!!!
SUPER-DUPER job!!!!!!!! you should put some music to this. *shouts* is there a band in the house?? *L*

Valerie

"...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-07-14 12:53 PM

*grabs her triangle* Did someone ask for a band? lol

Now in all seriousness, this is very well written. The meter was spot on and it read so freely. This would be a killer song to some music. Where's my MP3, huh?!

Thanks for sharing this.

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-14 02:40 PM

awesome song!

...you've written this very well...i liked it very much...enjoyed it lots!

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-14-2001).]

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-14 11:06 PM

Wow!
I think this is clearly the best of your recent posts. I truelly enjoyed it. WODERFUL SONG!!!

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-15 05:29 AM

Now THIS is song writing. Simply amazing. You got sugarpie all freaking out.
Somebody control that woman.....

Awesome job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-07-16 10:57 AM

*applause*

*standing ovation*

VERY, VERY nicely done!!!! This is awesome! I SO want to hear this on MP3... come on share! This some fanastic song writing, Hallu... Wowsers. THis is going in the library. OUTSTANDING work!

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-07-16 11:08 AM

WHOA!!! THIS WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!

Omg wow lol this was soooooo good!!! Ur such a wonderful song writer!!! great job!!!

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