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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
Hill As I sit here looking at old pictures I come across one It makes me sad Because I lost this person he was my boyfriend I let him go He let me go We went our own ways He graduated He has his own girlfriend now He doesn’t email IM or me It hurts to see him loving someone else I said let’s keep in touch that’s an old saying He doesn’t want to me to talk to him He thinks he’s all that I wish he knew that I still care He was a great friend until someone else loved him Everything went down hill from there It was like a ball rolling down a hill If you don’t catch it in time it’s gone That’s how our friendship went Either of us wanted to catch it before it’s gone Now it’s gone like the ball is I wish I could bring his friendship back into our lives But will that happen? Minna July 10, 2001 Maybe some people just aren't meant to be in our lives forever. Maybe some people are just passing through... it's like some people just come through our lives to bring us something: a gift, a blessing, a lesson we need to learn, and that's why they're here...you'll have that gift forever. Then he began to think of all the things Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I think you forgot to end your footnote, but thats OK. It was a wonderful poem, so full of emotion. Sometimes you find little hooks that make you hang on to the past, and it is so hard to get rid of them. Well, it was a great poem anyway. *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
your poems touch me...as this one has also...you have wrote this very well..esp explaining this hill and etc...i really liked this poem  ..and the after-thought is true and made me think [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-10-2001).] |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
it hurts too look at pictures, it hurts to see him dating my friend. i'm going on a date on Saturday with Eric, we are going to see a movie and dinner.. Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
It hurts to see a person you really care about be with somebody else... Especially when they totally ditch you to be with them all the time. I thought you expressed this well. Good job. - Cody - |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
This is so sad. Most people probably have had similar feelings.Great work. Death is but an escape from loneliness |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
It always sucks to see the person you care about ditch you for a mutual friend(or even an enemy) This hits home except from the guy's perspective. But close enough and a good job. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Minna, awesome job on the poem. I really liked it, but what caught my eye is what you said at the end.....so true and it's something I've never realized. Thank you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey Minna, I'm sure you'll find someone who will really love you and treat you like the princess that you are. *hugs* hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I've always been fond of poems like these. In a way I feel closer to a person who has a pain, this one is a truth that i hope that i won't have to face myself, but you know how it can be... its all denial. Excellent work. /Nick/ |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I liked the poem alot, Minna. You always write in such a raw form. It shows your emotions perfectly. The footnote at the end really got to me though. I've heard that before...but I've never had it written down fo rme. I read it over and over again....and although it's upseting me,it alsom aking me realize things that needed to be seen. So ya- I appreciate that. Again- I enjoyed the read. You did a wonderful job. |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
Now he's my friend his girl friend IMED me the other day.. So maybe our friendship is coming back to us I hope so.. Because he has helped me so much when my dad died he was there for me, when I'd cry he'd hold me until I was okay.. The last day that he was at my school I cryed because I could take it. So he said come here Min he hugged me just like before. He said don't give up in the world please I said I won't. The next day at school it wasn't the same without him because I missed him.. Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same. |
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