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Teen Poetry #5

bruised and beaten

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-10-29 04:50 PM

all these mixed emotions,
are making my ears ring.
your love finally hit me,
like a giant bee sting.

i don't know what to do,
i'm just so confused.
i don't want anyone to get hurt,
my heart is so bruised.

bruised and beaten,
just as the plot thickens
i begin to loose track,
as the pace is quickened.

~when i look, ur never there, but when i close my eyes, ur everywhere...2 me....~Michelle Branch

lil_pwheeler
Junior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 39
here

1 posted 2001-10-29 08:57 PM

Well you have depth. You just have too work on the wording of this one.
~PAT~

No one dies a virgin, life screws us all

~gretchenp34~
Junior Member

since 2001-10-08

Posts 46
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2001-10-29 09:27 PM

hey!!!!! i like this one.....i like it!!!!!!

Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-10-30 10:44 AM

Oyy...love can definately be a very difficult thing...hope things get better and i hope no one gets hurt...

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-10-30 11:41 AM

Nice write.

Love can be a bit confusing can't it?

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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