»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #5
»
check or checkmate?
| Teen Poetry #5 |
|
check or checkmate? |
|
|
knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i searched so long only in vain? my querie i never did reach it evaded my every move matched me step for step always one move away check or checkmate? mirrored my actions everytime one for one, and then again youre right in front of me and then so far away i searched so long just to be "... a hunter again want to see the world alone again to take a chance on life again so let me go" and ill search so long only in vain ...checkmate and i lose this game one tiny mistake it all comes crashing down now im alone again to search for what i want what i wanted was this to be away from you to 'see the world alone again' take my chances with what i have i found my place on this board ...check the quoted part is from DIDO's "hunter" “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 07-02-2001).] |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Tiffany Durham - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one. It was nice. I started to think of the double meaning of checkmate later on so I was confused at first, but overall you did a very good job. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
||
Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Get it!  -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
||
|
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a very well written poem, Tiff! I really liked the analogy of the chess game. Very creative... this isn't your best work I've read, but still an awesome read nonetheless. Enjoyed, as always. Keep posting all of your work. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
||
|
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
creative indeed...you've written this very well...Tiff  ...enjoyed the read...[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-02-2001).] |
||
|
Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
awwwww.... good poem tiff. i really liked it. i miss talking to you  *sniffs* jo But His word was in my heart |
||
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Good write!! Rhonda  "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Not my fav. poem by you, but it was a creative write. I liked the meaning of the poem..so yea...good job.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
The way you incorporated a song into your piece is very creative of you, Tiff. Well done on that. The meaning behind the poem was overall good but if you review it and perhaps add a little more power to make it really stand out, it'll be worth the 5 stars it really does deserve. ~AF~ Never speak disrespectfully of Society. Only people who can't get into it do that. |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You've shown your creativity. Not as good as your others but still a good write nice to see you sharing again hope to see more thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
||
|
Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Wonderful write... I loved it...[This message has been edited by Jessica (edited 07-07-2001).] |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
