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Let Go of Control
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Let Go of Control |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC 
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Dedicated to my loving Parents  Mistrusted, misguided I’m not gonna hide it The things that I do I know you don’t like it You don’t think I got control of myself Control of my wealth Control of my health But I got it under control Even though I can’t get out of this hole You wanna take control, you wanna take possession You think you are teaching me a life long lesson You wanna teach me something, get out of my way I’m learning something new every single day I’m learning how to live, how to survive For the first time in my life I feel completely alive Free to make mistakes Free to make decisions Free to live my life, and not plan with precision I’ll ride this life out and see where it takes me I’ll go with the flow and see when it breaks me It makes me a stronger individual Lessons from my past are still residual I look to these lessons for answers And I retain what I have learned I look back to see what’s missing when I’ve been badly burned Thankful for those lessons that I have been taught You win some, you lose some, that’s the way life’s fought Now I understand this, and I ask the same of you You cannot have a say in everything I do You filled my mind with knowledge for my first 18 years It’s time now to let go of all doubts, regrets, and fears You’ve tried your best and you’ve done all you can It’s time to let go of your child And treat me like a man "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
hey Jon,  enjoy it. you got a whole mess of lessons coming right your way. LOL I remember feeling just like this, then I did get out there,and WHOA! (real life sucks.) I've always said, I would never want to go through growing up again, but man, if I could go back and have my parents pay for everything again, no health benefits to worry about, no bills, no how am I gonna make rent this month and still eat?? oh, but getting there is half the fun. The older I get the smarter my parents keep getting. Still. LOL I really liked this Jon, you are a great writer |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow this is one cool poem!..i enjoyed this one HEAPS jon!. i loved the way you wrote it as though you were speaking to your parents. this is really good. i liked it lots! ............Daffodils |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Thanks for the replies. Sea-The funny thing is, I have already left the house. I do worry about where rent is coming,or electricity, or phone, or how many cheeseburgers from Mcdonald's I can get with the change in my pocket cause I don't have any money to eat.I've felt these things, that's where my parents come in and try to tell me how to run things.Oh well, thanks for reading.I always appreciate your responses. cherish-Thanks for the replies. This poem came out of my head in that style. I wrote it directed towards them cause this is something that I would love to say, so I was thinking in first person terms.Glad you liked it. "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow Jon! INCREDIBLE piece here, just incredible. I was thinking, maybe they are just trying to help...ya know? But if you've moved out and everything...then ya, Then need to let go-Realize you aren't a kid anymore. Awesome write though... You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jon, I know right where you live, well Clovis anyway, I got my first tattoo is Fresno  and lived in Oakhurst for 3 years. You should listen to what they say, it's only because they love you, not because they want to control you, really. Just listen then do what you're gonna do any way LOL you'll make it fine. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Good poem Jon. keep on writing... ps excuse my non depth reply |
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