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angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
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North East, USA

0 posted 2001-06-03 04:01 AM


Two cans at the counter…

for hearts wanting to do more
while buying coffee from a corner store.
Two cans with change meant to give away
to those less fortunate, for those whom we pray.

Two cans on the counter….

one for children abused, and neglected,
the other for animals, hurt and rejected.
To whom do we give when we have but one coin?
To which worthy fight do we symbolically join?

Two cans on the counter…..

pick them both up, yes give it a try.
For, each time I do, I can’t help but cry.
Two cans at the counter, the children’s is light
it is for the animals we’d much rather fight.

Two cans on the counter…….

But is there truth in a fight,
where we don't see first the child’s right?
Two cans on the counter, it’s always the same
we give to the animals, leave the children in shame.





I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT


[This message has been edited by angelbear (edited 06-03-2001).]

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Logan
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since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641
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1 posted 2001-06-03 04:11 AM


sigh, so very very true, well said, well read...gentle smile
Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-06-03 06:59 AM


Very nicely done ... a very poignant message angelbear.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
Posts 139
North East, USA
3 posted 2001-06-03 07:27 AM


Logan and Kit...

Want to thank you both for responding AND for understanding my intent here. I always get nervous about this issue when I voice it...sometimes people misunderstand my views! Wasn't sure if it would come out correctly in poetry.

Thanks for your comments.  

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-06-03 10:41 AM


this touches me angelbear...yes..your message conveyed perfectly poetic form...
as does your compassion and caring heart
take care
jm

I'm not right ... you're not wrong ...
Still I dont know ... what this love of ours is built upon.

Interloper
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Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-06-03 11:02 AM


Yes.  I'm glad you had the strength to pen this piece.  Well done.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
Posts 139
North East, USA
6 posted 2001-06-10 04:09 AM


Janet Marie and Interloper,

Again I am so glad that the point is seen here. And your replies are greatly appreciated.  

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

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