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One Breath At A Time
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One Breath At A Time |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia 
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One Breath At A Time It's come time for closure in what I thought was for life Good-bye is heard with what heart I have left Allow me to sigh through these tears that silently fall At what once were moments I knew best... I will smile to the heavens and still it will never be real A breath at a time to look back one last time From what were words on paper that now is worn Are lifes gifts to me I can no longer call mine... Just one breath at a time I want to see your face Let us run through those valleys we made long ago For there's our field of flowers we created one night When I was so certain you'd never let me go... One breath at a time for the last time so I can close my eyes And, forever will only be a moment we once had Let me go back, one breath at a time, Dear One To where our waters of pastels run along our path... Slowly, but surely, I will take in all the air I can And, will hold it as long as I can hold my memory of you Just let me see our gold mountains we've stood upon For one breath at a time is all I can do... There it is, our light, far more brighter than the sun One breath at a time I stare at this view And,I walk far into my memory of this world And,look back to still find my reflection of you... One breath at a time I'll carry what you've left me with And, a breath at a time I'll fade as the night For dawn will give hope to some who always cries But, for me, I'll drown in what I call life... One breath at a time I hope you remember the wind And, how it carried us to freedom within When the sun dances on water you must know it is me And, my last breath for prayers unheard once again... Sauni Sauni :) |
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zzz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 55 |
beautifully written |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Saunni, how very tender, and heartbreaking, and yes, there has to be closure to heal and to move on once again, for our pathway always leads us on our karma, of whatever it may be..peace to you...gentle smile |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An absolutely wonderfully, moving piece on closure, that speaks to the cleansing needed in order to move on as Logan said with our karma, and then it becomes just a piece of us put in its place, and not an all-consuming mass that overcomes us. Well done! ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them as tomorrow may never come ~*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Saunni~ 'When the sun dances on water you must know it is me' Such a lovely, lovely thought~ You are writing some very, very lovely poetry, sweet lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sauni--beautiful writing. Enjoyed the read. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful penned.....love it. Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"Let me go back, one breath at a time, Dear One To where our waters of pastels run along our path... Slowly, but surely, I will take in all the air I can And, will hold it as long as I can hold my memory of you Just let me see our gold mountains we've stood upon For one breath at a time is all I can do... There it is, our light, far more brighter than the sun One breath at a time I stare at this view And,I walk far into my memory of this world And,look back to still find my reflection of you... One breath at a time I'll carry what you've left me with And, a breath at a time I'll fade as the night For dawn will give hope to some who always cries But, for me, I'll drown in what I call life..." This is very open and romantic...I know it's a reminisce of sadness but it's beautifully expressed! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done... enjoyed! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked this much  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . let it flow Saunni!!! I love this one. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . let it flow Saunni!!! I love this one. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful Sauni-- this is captivating writing...one breath at a time indeed, left me breathless! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Beautiful, sad...one breath at a times comes the healing. Enjoyed! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Lovely written words, the verse "And look back to still find my reflection of you". I appreciate what you've said here, the longing and loss are profound and we continue to heal, one breath at a time. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Closure is crucial to healing and moving on. You write of it well. All writing comes |
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