»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #14
»
stinging solace
| Open Poetry #14 |
|
stinging solace |
|
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
|
Let me be your shelter from the storm The light within your dark The anthem of all vexed confused adolescents who pray for such a miracle to manifest You light a cigarette My heart contracts I continue to tell my tale though never pausing never betraying myself how it still hurts to see you find solace in such |
||
| © Copyright 2001 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You light a cigarette My heart contracts I continue to tell my tale though never pausing never betraying myself how it still hurts to see you find solace in such ============================== this is written with an aching depth and honesty...and a sincere, tender pen. So nice to see your name here again Kaile. seems like its been awhile ... take care jm she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
||
|
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
so nice to be back here too...  i am almost embarassed by your kind words...i know that smoking doesn't make a person or whatsoever but i still hate to see my friends pick up smoking as a way to destress... |
||
|
VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, my, how I do agree with you and you've said it so incredibly well, incredibly! AND when it wears off and another one is needed the person is more nervous and more stressed than before each cigarette was smoked. |
||
|
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
and the person realises that smoking is bad for his health but he just wont have it any other way because he is reliant on smoking and on the monetary benefits it brings... thank you, VAS |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now this is definitely not the way I imagined that line could be used faterider. . . great job with it. . . a totally unique perspective. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
|
Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Interesting... good movement throughout and I agree that it's a unique perspective...well done...  KIt is to do with tree-ferns: |
||
|
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you...am glad to evoke different emotions with this challenge lines... |
||
|
brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kaile loved this especially this verse. The anthem of all vexed confused adolescents who pray for such a miracle to manifest "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
||
|
Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This one definitely has a sting. A cigarette never did solve anything. What are they thinking? All writing comes |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
