»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #14
»
Bow Tie Pasta Bro
| Open Poetry #14 |
|
Bow Tie Pasta Bro |
|
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
|
Bow Tie BRO Where’d you get that itty, bitty tie, Harold? Looks like you raided Momma’s cupboard searching for Spaghetti-Os, but came up with some creepy invention instead, or haven’t you noticed that bow tie pasta on your neck? You’re not going to school dressed like that, are you? I mean, I AM your big sister and no brother of mine is going to dress like a total NERD! What’s wrong with you? You used to be normal, well, maybe not, but you didn’t care how you looked; where are all those stained T-shirts with the weird logos? And what is WITH that hair? Is that Mom’s V-05, or did you get some olive oil to go with the pasta? You are going to RUIN me. I am finally popular! It took years of hard work, but I’m one of the COOL KIDS! Now you’re going to show up the first day of high school looking like the Absent-Minded Professor! What do you mean you don’t care about being cool? Did some alien ship come down and replace my little Bro with a junior scientist android? Well, I’m not driving you to school, NO WAY! MMMMMOOOOOMMMM! Please, I CAN’T, I just CAN’T drive up with stupid little Harold looking like the geek of all time! You can’t make me! Argggghhhh! This is going to be the worst day of my whole life! Harold, you scrunch down and pretend like you’re not there, you hear me? Don’t you dare sit up! I’ll get out of the car first, you count to one-hundred, then you can leave. Got it??? God, I’m so ashamed! Hey Chelsea, Hiya Lindsey, oh hi, Taylor, oh yeah, I know, I absolutely detest school! Don’t you just wish it could be summer forever? Huh? Oh, yeah, that’s my brother, Harold. What? Hey!!! Don’t you DARE say anything bad about Harlold! He’s a genius, you know! Smarter than you three will EVER be! You’re just jealous ‘cause you wish you had a brother that smart! He may seem like a nerd, but he’s not! He’s going to be famous one day, you’ll see! He’s going to discover the cure for cancer! He’s already working on experiments! He’s cooler than all of us put together, so just leave him alone! Jesus Christ, will you look at Trevor? He must have grown five inches over the summer… © 2001 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 06-09-2001).] |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Corinne - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This, Corinne, was fantastic right up to the last two lines. So poignant, so powerful, so real of sibling rivalry and family unity. The last lines, too much reality there, and that kind hurts, that's my bias, for what its worth. I mean, for me, it destroyed every ounce of poignancy gained in the defense and pride of the brother. [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 06-09-2001).] |
||
|
Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Nice write, thanks. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ You rock my socks off with reality !! Yeah .... it reads like it happened ! I love your honesty ... *Hugging* reality here ! A well-deserved round of applause ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
||
|
Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
You gave me my first big laugh of the day, Cor. Thank you for that and the memories of, geez, so loooong time ago. Glad you are back...gentle smile |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Good write, good read, enjoyed. |
||
Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! WOW, this poem just blew me away with it's wonderful cadence of realism in family life! So very clever and your heart pours out with faith to him in this well-written masterpiece! STANDING OVATION!!! You deserve this great round of applause! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
||
|
Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
~Laughing in delight!~ I LOVED this! Oh gosh, that does seem forever ago.  Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just goes to show you that no matter what. . . family will always be. . . great job with this one Corinne, a bit different for you, but that's good. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
|
Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
a lot different and totally original and refreshing! Kathleen Blake |
||
|
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, VAS, I did struggle with how to end this, thought it would be more "in character" to have her switch the subject back away from herself and her brother. If you have any suggestions, I'd love to hear them! Thanks, Titia. Marge! Thank you, sweet lady! Having kids gets you thinkin' about the way they treat each other! LOL, thanks, Logan! Yeah,it was long, long ago! Glad you enjoyed, friend! Thanks, Seymour! Thank you for such kind words, Noah! I was thinking about how siblings pretend to hate each other but really do care, watching my two fight and pick on each other, but going to bat for each other when the need arises. I'm a big sis too, was a rotten one to my younger brother, but always defended him (much to his horror!). Thank you, Tovi! Yeah, Sven, don't know where this came from, and it is very different, not even sure if this qualifies as a poem! Thank you! Thank you very much, Kathleen! Cor |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
