When you Write with Love ............................ [repost]

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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-03-23 02:15 PM

When you Write with Love

When I awoke this morn, I looked around ~
and what broke my heart, was the silent sound
of no one breathing, and no heart’s beat ~
there lay a note…my heartbreak…complete.

While the missive I read gave my eyes a sting,
there wrapped in the note, lay her ring,
and without reading the letter, word for word,
I knew it was full of the feelings I’d heard.

She doesn’t belong here anymore,
her heart now lies on another’s shore,
for he spoke to her in cadence so fine
now her heart is no longer mine.

He used expression with karmic song
and thus asked her to sing along,
took her heartstrings, plucked them well
so no longer will she be compelled

to listen to my words, or hear my voice,
I’ve lost her by my very own choice,
to not hear her, nor her words of love,
she’d packed her things, flew like a dove...

She doesn’t live here anymore,
she’s flown off for other shores,
and only lingering traces of her kiss
will I feel from the cool dawn’s mist.

He drew poetic pictures, and lured her in
and thus their soul’s dance did begin,
he took her love, which once was mine
impressed upon her, and his words entwined,

and he spoke of things she must have missed,
for he sealed his messages with love and a kiss,
he promised her the moon, under starred sky,
he would sip wine while he gazed in her eyes,

and so intoxicated she must have become,
that in my silence, to him she’s run,
and I cannot blame her any more,
that she’s run off for distant shores.

When I awoke this morn and looked around
what broke my heart was that silent sound
there is no one breathing, no heart’s beat ~
here laid the note…now my heartbreak’s…complete.

20 June 2000
©KRJ

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1 posted 2001-03-23 02:19 PM

Dear Sunshine........you've left me wiping the tears from my eyes. The emotions breathe on their own in this. I applaud.

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

Wilfred Yeats
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2 posted 2001-03-23 03:15 PM

heartbreaking words - wrenching mine - I can only say you're in my prayers

PoeticKnight
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3 posted 2001-03-23 04:17 PM

Now if I could write like this, I'd make myself proud. I felt this.

Dee
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Queensland, Australia

4 posted 2001-03-23 07:53 PM

Sunshine,
Bravo. Such a beautiful way with words you have.

When I awoke this morn and looked around
what broke my heart was that silent sound
there is no one breathing, no heart’s beat ~
here laid the note…now my heartbreak’s…complete.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Martie

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5 posted 2001-03-23 08:02 PM

Karilea--this is wonderful...I'm so glad you reposted it...beautifully done, my friend..and IWTIHWT!

Mysteria

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6 posted 2001-03-23 10:08 PM

Breathtakingly perfect!

~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~

Butterflies_dont_cry
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Michigan

7 posted 2001-03-23 11:32 PM

Karilea~ This is magnifique! You drew me in
so deeply that upon the last stanza nothing
else existed except for me...and the weave.
Beautiful work...tugs at the heart
and the soul my friend~

mariee66
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8 posted 2001-03-24 12:40 PM

This was so sad. Great writing!

Marsha

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9 posted 2001-03-26 06:43 AM

Kari dear heart, truly outstanding work. This is utterly beautiful, filled with all the emotions and feelings. I really love this one dear heart, utterly utterly wonderful.

Love it and into my library it goes.
Thank you for this one dear heart
love and warm stuff
Puck

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

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10 posted 2001-03-26 10:00 AM

That was beautiful. Very moving. I wish I could describe how that made me feel but, am at a loss for words. Excellent.

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