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Coal Surrender
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since 2001-04-01

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0 posted 2001-04-20 12:18 PM

Trappings of Burlap

Dressing in the rain,
white cotton transparent
with the touch of each drop.

So like her words to reveal me,
yesterday's trappings of burlap
stripped away.
A soul's worth of dreams newly
spawned by sweet addiction,
as the final whimpering of banal
songs expires unnoticed.

From musty cellars rise waking hopes,
a crimson crowned princess has kissed
the sleeping king.

Coal

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-04-20 12:21 PM

Finally, we get to officially Welcome you to Passions! I had a feeling from seeing your responses that you had the makings of a fine poet, and I was not mistaken!

Check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

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with you

2 posted 2001-04-20 12:21 PM

Welcome! You know, I just love this.....so beautifully done! I can't wait to read more.

SEA

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-04-20 12:51 PM

This is a very cool write...
I love the cryptic-mystic dark edge to it...
and the unique imagery
Welcome to Poetry Land CS...
I too look forward to more of your creative work.
jm

I love your imperfections ... I love your everything ...
Your broken heart ... your broken wings.

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

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on the horizon of a fairytale

4 posted 2001-04-21 12:42 PM

From musty cellars rise waking hopes

and sometimes there are treasures hidden in those musty dark cellars

beautiful tale of hope...

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

Coal Surrender
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since 2001-04-01

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5 posted 2001-04-21 09:39 AM

Karilea, Sea, Janet, and WC,

Thank you for each warm response.

Coal

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2001-04-21 10:40 AM

Coal~
Welcome to the posting side of Passions.

Very nice portrayal of your thoughts.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

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Oregon

7 posted 2001-04-21 03:47 PM

This is so superb, Coal; I can hardly wait to read more of your shtuff!!! Welcome. Oooh, did I say I like this!!!!

JLR
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since 2001-02-04

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8 posted 2001-04-21 03:54 PM

Wonderful! And welcome!

Coal Surrender
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9 posted 2001-04-22 09:16 AM

Marge, Virginia, and JLR

Thank you for replying so favorably.

Coal

Martie

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10 posted 2001-04-22 11:04 AM

Coal--Welcome to Passions...I enjoyed your poem...beautifully done!!

Lady In White

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11 posted 2001-05-03 08:33 AM

Your imagery is very vivid. Write on...

Coal Surrender
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12 posted 2001-05-04 06:27 AM

Martie, Lady in White,

Thanks so much!

Coal

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