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Of Governments and Gods |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
we all grow slowly into the same person the originality only being different thoughts of one mind who the hell are we and name a good thing weve done the thought of who we are makes me sick everything anyone does is wrong so arrogant to think a whole universe would cater to the needs of one but look at us still standing here following the ways of the dumb but who am i to preach of serving when theres no work to be done the god you love more than anything, youve never seen the drive that opens your eyes is nothing but false hope and lies and it never turns out the right way nothing is ever the right way i hate the way things are going look at you i cant stand what you do frustrating to watch you waste away as i stand bewildered with nothing to say i just wish i could show you a better way you brag of free will now let me see you use it and anything youve ever touched, youve managed to abuse it and your forsake your innocence until you loose it what the hell is going on dont just close your eyes its gone on too long I hate you I hate myself this life is nothing you will burn yourself out and when you finally do youll know what i am talking about i hate what i see and it doesnt change please just change take it away go the hell away |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WOW! This is one amazingly powerful piece! Some of the lines in this read like a slap in the face, more like a reality check. It's the kind of piece that you have to just read and really take into to fully understand what you are trying to say. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. Library material for sure. ~AF~ GREMLINS ARE TRYING TO STEAL MY PANTS!!!!!!! *sobs* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lots of feelings and emotions within and without...James |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
thanks |
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JesslikestoMoo New Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 1 |
hey look at me go! eh hem anyway, AWESOME poem, it was straight foreward and honest. aw crap i can't think of anything to say, i'm drawing blanks. Just, know that i think your a stupendous writer and can't wait to see more of it! (that took me 15 min..oy!) jess |
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KiNkY sLiNKy New Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 1 |
HOLA!!!!!!!!! EVEN THO i hate poetry.. ill always think urs is good ok even if i dont understand it but thats only bcuz i luv u =) NOW I SIGNED THIS AND I HOPE U FEEL LOVED OK even tho u make me cold and thirsty i learned to forgive u.. now have fun =) LOVE!!!!! the greatest person of all.... me =) by the way.. i even like registered for this crap JUST so i could DO THIS FOR YOU!!!!!! |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Hey Paul, Wonderful poem...very true. Except one part that I don't agree with... there's always work to be done. Sometimes it slaps you in the face, sometimes it exists quietly. Hauntingly even. But maybe that's just me.  You know how I am. Well, thanks for posting. I'll talk to you later. Be kind, be true, be bold, be you. |
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Hellseyes Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 120Kansas, USA |
wow this is da [edit].../Drew/ [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 07-26-2001).] |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
Thank you, all of you. I appreciate the support. For a detailed highly repetitive explanation of this poem feel free to go to critical analysis |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Very good...  |
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