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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212
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Burnt Rags What news breaks from this treaty but the patterns read in blood stained water a message sent in ripples down stream Heart frays ending in the shadow of white flags in midst of rubble a woman clings to burnt rags a peeling of man's haste in the failing of his charge At large the scoundrel of emotion's stabbing thorn a trail of scarlet spilt in paste upon the leaves Willie © 2001 |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
a peeling of man's haste in the failing of his charge At large the scoundrel of emotion's stabbing thorn great imagery here!!!.. i like this one.. welcome WRBreezin.. great first post.. |
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ShannonM Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 104Drifitng |
I can see this very clearly. Thank you. ShannonM |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
This one certainly left me thinking... not many do that ya know?  lol... The imagery you left here made everything so clear.  Awesome write!~Jess |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
Your beautiful distaste is a breath of what used to be freash air. I can only hope for more while I get enjoyable. |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
Your beautiful distaste is a breath of what used to be freash air. I can only hope for more while I get enjoyable. |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Moshpit, Shannon, Jessica, and Carolinadreams, Thanks for the replies, though I'm not quite sure I comprehend the one left by "carolinadreams" I appreciate it just the same. Willie |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
I like--Such crisp images--Welcome to DP  Can't wait to read more--LOVE ELMO <3 |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Why thanks Qtpie, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Willie |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Powerful! ~Tier |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hi Willie...Welcome to Passions! A great first post and I look forward to seeing more of your work!!! |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Thanks Tier, and serenity! I'm glad this one caught your eye. Willie |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
WOW! LadyPeach1 |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Thanks Lady Peach, your reply is just as sweet as the sound of your name! Willie |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
Awesome write my fellow poet! I felt like I was "Scarlet", hehe......standing on the sidelines of the civil war, experiencing everything your wrote! Loved the story it portrayed and how it flowed. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
dope poem... the images sent chills down my back..lookin forward to more from you... " How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Scarlet Lady, and Kaos...Thanks for reading!. Ms Scarlet, I'll tell Rhet Butler you said hello! Willie |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Willie, I apologize for the late welcome, but most definitely Welcome to Passions. This is an outstanding write. Love the images and lack of cliches' Annie May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat... |
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