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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-07-31 03:08 PM

What's up with you?
Why don't you call anymore?
Why don't you check up on me,
to make sure that I'm okay?

What's up with you?
Sayin' I won't leave you alone?
I ain't the one who's callin'
three or four times every day.

I ain't the one who calls,
I ain't the one who talks,
I ain't the one you think I am,
I can't be.

What's up w/ you?
why do you say that *stuff*?
Why do you talk trash about me?
When you're just hillbillie yourself?

What's up with you?
Why do I even care anymore?
It's just a bunch of *crap* right now.
And I don't know if I can take it.

I ain't the one you think I am,
I gave you a b-day present, yes,
and you know I'll always care,
but I ain't gonna be the one you think I am.

What's up with you?
Thinkin' I'm your little *girl* all the time,
thinkin' I'm the one who'll always be around,
but you'll wake up and I'll be gone.

What's up with you?
You take my love for granted,
you think I'll always be "old reliable"
and whenever you need me I'll be there?

I ain't always gonna be your *girl*,
the one you can always "rely" on,
because that's just a bunch of *crap* for me,
and I ain't gonna live that way.

What's up with you?
I'm givin' you a choice,
you can have me now,
or maybe never.

What's up w/ you?
I ain't gonna turn down other guys just cuz I like you.
There's stuff you don't know about me.
Like you ain't the only one.

I ain't gonna let you think you're the only one.
You dumped me, remember?
I ain't gonna let you use me like that.
You ain't the only one.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by.

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

1 posted 2001-08-01 12:12 PM

Hmmmm well I am not very good at giving constructive critiques, but I'll give it a shot here. To me this read more like a letter, than a poem. Inwhich it was still good to read! (see I said I wasnt good at this lol) Hey ! we all have different ways to express our thoughts and feelings. So who am I to change anything! Anyways, keep your *chin up!*

Mags

Hellseyes
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 120
Kansas, USA

2 posted 2001-08-01 10:57 AM

i can relate...i liked this one../Drew/

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

3 posted 2001-08-01 12:36 PM

Life sucks.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2001-08-01 05:46 PM

I can relate to this...a woman friend of mine used to call me every day no more then six months ago...now she call me maybe once a month...whats going on?...she's a very busy woman...funny how she had time for me before...life seems to be about priorities...and right now I'm low priority...James

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

5 posted 2001-08-01 06:43 PM

Very strong...

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

6 posted 2001-08-01 09:27 PM

I liked the whole story here--looks like we're readin' the same book--lol--life sux, then ya die--great work! LOVE ELMO <3

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

7 posted 2001-08-01 09:35 PM

I like this Allysa..the wording was nice, a real casual pissed off sort of feel to it. Very powerful.

-Kosetsu

Of all the things that I confess,
Here's one that is doubtless
I will love you always Jess
Never think I could love you less

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