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Hollow Mornings |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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Hollow mornings Lying still Gray sky warnings Fight my will I cannot face The world today I'm out of place I've lost my way I sleep in vain But do not heal There will be pain Waiting to feel I wish for dreams To let me be They tear my seams With memory Until I wake The pieces thrown Together ache I am alone |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I don't believe I have seen you before... but I like this piece. The shortness of each line makes a nice effect. Good work. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Kevin, this was simply superb. Described feelings I've had many, many times. Keep posting the good stuff. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Excellent piece Kevin. I thought this one was really great, I can relate to those feelings right now. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
damn dude. Finally someone put some more dark stuff up. that was a great one man, good form and everything. You write some good stuff man, keep it up. >¶Øʆ< |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Title, amazing. THe poem iteslef, amazing aswell. The simplicity of the syllables is wonderful and it flows so great. The theme was kick but Kevin, I know how it feels. I liked this one. One of my favs by you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
First I wish to say sublime poem!!! And secondly i wish to say that no matter what you may think you are not alone. For you are apart of us all our "friends within a family" And i know personally that family doesnt alway stick together, but when that family is your friends.... Watch out because you never truly know how many are there for you and care until you ask for a little help. I hope everything will turn out quite alright. And if not feel free to e-mail me , and i promise i wont leave you alone anylonger. ~Amanda~ To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Not bad! I really liked "I wish for dreams To let me be They tear my seams With memory" Keep writing, your fan, Me |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Wow....this was great! I loved the short phrases, it made it all seem so real and I think it relates to so many people here....the title attracted me ofcourse. I loved it! Keep Writing! Salma PS Nice to see you back Master  |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Another superb piece from the Kevmeister. Def. one of my favs by you. Spifiliciously delicious. Keep it up! :.) Vreni |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Wow.. what a happily morbid view of the mornings. But then again, I've always believed good morning to be an oxymoron.< !signature--> "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. [This message has been edited by DragonFang (edited 01-20-2001).] |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Well thanks alot to everyone who gave me some feedback on this i guess we all hate mornings appreciate it guys and allan, ive been here for like 2 years i think lol, but im a watcher |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Kevin your words are always so well written in the poems, great job on this one! ...I like mornings sometimes  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ sorry i missed this one. but i really did like it i hope to read more soon*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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steve New Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 9Canada |
Im not one for posting replies much, but i have to say that this poem i could relate with.. i like. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
it always amazes me to see how some writers can create such depth in such short, but catchy lines wonderful post thank you for sharing keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey I hated mornings when all that came of them was hangovers...but a couple of weeks in the hospital will change all that. The sunrise is a beautiful thing...but as much as I hate to say it...I miss the hangover thing.   anyways, a simple, yet eloquent piece. My deepest envy goes to thee. Thanks for sharing...hope to see more from you. ~*~Jessica~*~ *the expected escape is only a portal to true devine Hell...leave that door alone* |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow..i like that alot! this is the first peice ive read from you but its ok...hope to see more soon <3 kim |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. This one's from way back  This is a great poem. I loved the flow.. everything fit together perfectly. Wonderful job, Kevin! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This is the first of your poems I've read but I'm impressed. I really liked this one. *S*Staci I skate hard, fall hard, and cry hard..... |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great tile, loved the short lines and excellent piece all round. it's going straight in the library " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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