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It Only Took A Moment
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It Only Took A Moment |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 It only took a moment he glanced, she glanced they found this person in words what words! a gluing together of emotion’s motion a tidal ocean of come and see do and say pulled them in to this sway…. it only took a moment she stayed with him in his mind he could not leave her thoughts entwined and like ivy climbing vines their words clung to each in kind it only took a moment it was more than a dance more than a rhapsody she’d start the song he’d write the melody what collaboration what a duo’s duet the more they wrote the more their thoughts met it only took a moment her inspiration would ring his pen would bring them together ~ forever ~ his feelings wrought his words she sought O emotions havoc caught It only took a moment he would draw in breath she would loose a sigh he would feel the heat she could feel the beat O the emotion O vast ocean O the commotion when poets collide 01.22.01 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 01-22-2001).] |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Absolutely brilliant! I loved this one. Great word flow, imagery and form. Lovely. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, now this is sheer brilliance, utterly perfectly beutifully written. Yes of course I love it, (now do I get to put my feet up? ) Absolutely stunning. And on the less is more theory, I should have just left a blank space love. But then you wouldn't know I'd visited would you.  Take care love Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"when poets collide".... WOW!.... great image here ms. sunshiny one... a fine write from you!  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this is beautiful ......love it!! helen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I love this one. . . a moment in time. . . in space. . . on another plane. . . Excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
dragonpoe, I have a feeling, coming from you, that's high praise! Thank you!... Marsha, you keep practicing on that "less" and I'll practice on "more"...LOL...thank you!... doreen, I so appreciate the "fine"...thank you... Thank you very much Helen... Sven, so you caught that, hey?...thank you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, Excellent writing. *L* |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy, |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sunshine--I love the rhythm in this. Capitally done. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Poeminister, your capital tops it off! Thank you! |
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