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dark of moon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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written sweetly from my soul etched across blue sky of olde... a majesty of lines untold, and yes, you are my only one. every word is etched in gold complicity of line, unfold a roll of carpet, red in scroll for majesty of self, undone... and every day? a bell in toll, reminder of a day grown cold I pray that I will not grow old, and ache for fingernail of fun... watchful of the moon in full the spell of sea, and her sweet pull, pirouhette in dirtied tulle-- the dark of moon shivers the sun. |
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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
*the dark of moon shivers the sun.* utterly utterly... oh hell, the whole stanza before it unfastens me. Rich, melodic, and somehow tender (and by that I do not mean gentle or affectionate). Gorgeous -- and I do not use abuse the word -- describes this in and out. Love and spirit to you. Be well. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
lovely writing, serenity... very!! melodic and fluid... 'and yes, you are my only one'... that's so beautiful, believe me!!  an awesome write! |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Eerily romantic, it has a certain mystery to it. Very nice Serene. I like much. Rich |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is so full of imagery that I can SEE this poem!! Wonderful!  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
S, I love the form used here, and the images. Very very nice.. Sandra |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Dear Serenity-- "watchful of the moon in full the spell of sea, and her sweet pull,"--I love those lines. Wonderful flow and imageries in this piece. As always superb writing. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ YES ! So gracefully written. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
sweet gently love inhere, wonderful image...loved it. Charisma |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Written with the elegance that only you could pen. Wonderful to read your works and the quality of your talent to share your thoughts so vividly. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
I loved the imagery here also. I could see everything! Thanks. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Loved both the imagery and the rhyme scheme you used on this one. Great write, but I've come to expect nothing less from you  ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all muchly for your kindness--and yes...I can just feel springtime coming on... lovely love to all! Big hugs for each and every! (serenity exits, purring...) grin. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, wow... the title caught me, but the poem just pulled me. Amazing write. Parker |
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