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A Rage of Shadows (I think I've beaten my writer's block)
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A Rage of Shadows (I think I've beaten my writer's block) |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A rage of shadows Exhales from the mouth of night, A luscious curve of Caliginous haze Rolling through the twilight. Fragile eyes stare From beyond the dingy mist, Her dreams brutally raped By the distorted phantom Of fate. A callous skyline Throws darkness in veils Around a writhing, sobbing form, Indifferent to the torture Screaming in her silent lungs. She remembers the moment Her lover was stripped of life And tossed aside in a heap Of foul carrion... And she wonders if she can ever Face the shafts of sunlight Of slicing day again. For now the fury of shadows Murmur within her thoughts And she watches with empty eyes As the luscious curves Of caliginous haze Sweep over her tragic existence. *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Wonderful Krissa.. yes, you definately beat that writers block! Glad to see you back.  "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My goodness!!! This is fantastic.... you know I've been reading a lot of older poetry lately and remember the first time you came to Passions. You've grown in talent since then..and you were superb from the start!  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This really is awesome! Glad to know you're writer's block is past you now -SEA |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
You definetly battered down your writer's block with this piece. A very dark and painful piece, I think I have an idea where inspiration came from... Another excellent piece sweetheart, I love your dark imagery and your poignantly sorrowful visions. Abrahm Simons "It doesn't matter if we turn to dust Turn and turn and turn we must I guess I'll see you dancing in the ruins" - Blue Oyster Cult |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Krista, you certainly beat your writers block dear this was fantastic, loved it. For now the fury of shadows Murmur within her thoughts And she watches with empty eyes As the luscious curves Of caliginous haze Sweep over her tragic existence. nice imagery Maree |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Krista--This has such atmesphere...love your word choices...great writing! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh woo i like this fits my mood to a tee |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Cassie- Thanks my friend, tis good to be back. Sharon- Thank you, you've brought a to my face. SEA- Thank you very much! Abrahm- I'm glad you liked it hon, thank you for reading. Maree- Thank you very much my friend. Martie- Thank you, a compliment from you is a great honor to me. Walt- Glad it fit your mood, yuh.  But I'm sad you're in this mood...it's not fun...but thanks for reading! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Krista! Even your 'dark' pieces are a pleasure to read! Denise |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Krista~ It's so good to see you posting your gems again Well, where should I start...this leaves me breathless. I "feel" your words and was pulled in by the tale weaved in this. The imagery, the flow, the powerful words were all poetic perfection. This was an intense, dark read, but on a poetic standpoint - outstanding!Take care, Melissa< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
No doubt about it......you beat your writer's block and going from how superbly this piece was written, you sent you muse to school. This was wonderfully stated and brings the anguish out masterfully. I enjoyed the write but I would not wish this mood for anyone. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Powerful, descriptive, wrenching! No writer's block here. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Melissa- Why thank you, my dear friend! It's so great to hear from you again! Mark- Thank you so much for the kind words, I'm so glad you stopped in to read. VAS- Thank you, I appreciate it! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Alwye~ Very visual piece and you certainly have beaten your writers block....great write ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"She remembers the moment Her lover was stripped of life And tossed aside in a heap Of foul carrion... And she wonders if she can ever Face the shafts of sunlight Of slicing day again." Wow... what a way to beat writer's block. Only you, my friend. Another piece that deserves publication and immortality. For now, it will go in my library! Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is fantastic! Truly is! Thanks for the read. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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