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Last Battle
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa 
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Last Battle Are we not the same anymore, Have we not the space to grow, Have I changed so much, you cannot see, Am I not the man you hoped I'd be, Are we tearing ourselves apart, Trying to battle with helpless hearts, When hearts are truly fickle things, Away in an instant, on gossimer wings, Illusive, forgotten, the memories fade, The last hand in the deck has been played, So now must I play solitaire, For wanting to tell you I care, This time no beginning at the end, Theres no remedy to recommend, I am the camel, and you are the straw, I can't play loves games, any more, Dont't think I blame you, Thats not in my heart, One scar too many, Too heal in the dark, Victims of circumstance, playthings of fate, Emotions a formulae hard to equate, Fate, deal me again, I'll play solitaire, 'Till the end of the world, I don't care. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Olias, this is very sad....but a good, melancholy read. Thank you. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I could've rewritten this whole thing-----as if it were mine. This is spooky. Have you possesed my tongue? The last hand in the deck has been played So now must I play solataire... This time no beginning at the end... or is it her you have possesed. I am speechless. Your word are too much. I don't know what to say. There's not a full moon tonight. (Not even in the UK) Thank you...but I'm not sure why. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Sunshine, Thanks for replying, I sometimes like to explore the rainy side of the street, take care. JLR, Thank you for your kind response, I didn't posses you honest, the only spirits around here are amber and reside in bottles. I'm pleased you enjoyed reading. Regards to you both, Olias. [This message has been edited by OLIAS (edited 02-16-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So now must I play solitaire, For wanting to tell you I care, This time no beginning at the end, Theres no remedy to recommend, I am the camel, and you are the straw, I can't play loves games, any more, Dont't think I blame you, Thats not in my heart, One scar too many, Too heal in the dark, Victims of circumstance, playthings of fate, Emotions a formulae hard to equate, Fate, deal me again, I'll play solitaire, 'Till the end of the world, I don't care. ================= Olias this is a very cool poem ... excellent use of metaphor and phrasing great use of some popular cliche's as well... yet nothing read cliche' awesome cadence and pace...picked up as the poem built up to its ending. very well done poet sir ... and may I add its great to see your name here once again  When you see thru loves illusion, theres the danger your perfect lover looks like a perfect fool you go running off in search of a perfect stranger |
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