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Black Widow Poet
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Black Widow Poet |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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silken threads shimmer in sunshine's pure light intricate weaving an artist's delight moving in closer it's beauty is clear but danger is lurking should you get too near what could it hurt just an innocent touch you try to hold back the temptation's too much helpless you struggle and try to break free a prisoner of passion forever you'll be the black widow poet has wrapped you in rhyme as the hour glass echoes the passing of time -vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow, Vicky, this is good..dangerously scary!! I've seen many black widow spiders around and this sure does make me think of one...I'm going to watch out for this poet!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ This is very well done - The web has been spun - Beware the dangerous bite of the spider-in-the-night. There is no avoiding her this poet of the poisoned bite Now I'll never get to sleep for thinking of this fright ! ! *You're just a thriller !  And I'm right there with PdV ... I'm for avoidance at all costs ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Excellent flow!!! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"the black widow poet has wrapped you in rhyme as the hour glass echoes the passing of time" Beautiful poem...wrapped me up and you can anytime with such fine rhyme...nicely written. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great tight rhythum and rhyme scheme!! I love the overall metaphor of the whole poem... such illustrations encase the power of the title all the way through....great write for sure!! I really enjoyed...ethome |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon- thanks so much for the enthusiasm... yep...definitely beware..lol. Marge- LOL...thanks for making me smile with your reply, my friend.. I hope you slept at least a little..lol. big hugs to you, my friend.. VAS- much thanks...glad you enjoyed. Poeminister- guess i'll just have to keep my silken thread handy for wrapping.. really glad you enjoyed. ethome- thanks so much for the positive input.. so happy you liked it. thanks all, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
HHHHHHhmmmmmm ... a warning huh? Well now, it seems as if it is a bit dangerous to approach this lil lady. Just how dangerous is she my sweet friend? Loved the write and the whole thing made my spurs tingle you know. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Excellent work, V...you sure have me wrapped in your web of words! Thank for sharing....peace! Nathan |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Mark- LOL...well, she's not TOO dangerous, my friend.. just make sure youare gentle when you step into her web.. gotta love those tinglin' spurs..lol. Nate- so glad you got 'wrapped up' in this one. really happy you enjoyed.. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Wow, Vicky! You never impressed me as dangerous before! Gives me a new respect for you. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
tempting tempting... ouch!!! a great poem |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
outstanding! loved this! -Tier |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I know that woman!!! Almost had me...I was lucky to escape with my virtue!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
vicky....loved this one lady!!! I wrote a couple on this theme m'self, there was a particularly nasty one about a preying mantis...lol...but I am glad I deleted now, as you have written this most eloquently! well done, m'friend... |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Excellent flow and rhyme.... I'll take my chances on the bite! I love it ..... ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
you go girl! this is awesome stuff..the stuff poetry is weaved of!  so.. ms. read me...i've read you..and i love it..!! very wonderful write..even rates a "WOWWY!!"  hugs, g "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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blackwid0w_99 New Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 6 |
couldnt resist reading this one nice flow to it... nice one to read on my first day at the site ;-)... perhapes the wid0ws found a new home ;-) The Widow The wid0w spins her silken web Beauty between fine gossamer thread Frost drapes like diamonds glistening in the dusk Enticing… provoking… curiosity a must Though many see not the shinning array See not the warning the cold frost does display Flying tangled into clinging weave Allowing shinning smile to deceive Wrapped in silken sheets they end their strife As the wid0ws fangs sink in… to end their life Then on to the next… "Come… pray let us tarry a while" The wid0w turns with sparkling frosted smile Seeking sustenance for heart, body and mind The wid0w seeks to feed on all she finds Romance, love, passion… hunger all end the same Life near the wid0w a dangerous game |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very clever, Vicky! Denise |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marilyn- LOL...well...i'm not REALLY so dangerous...but don't tell anyone...ok? thanks for popping in and giving this one a read... hugs to you.. walt- see what happens when you let temptation get the best of you.. thanks for the reply, my friend. Tier- thanks so much. really glad you enjoyed... Balladeer- LOL @ you...i hope you learned you lesson, my friend... thanks for reading...glad you like... serenity- a praying mantis, huh? sounds interesting...lol. thanks so much for the kind words, my friend. really glad you enjoyed.. Irie- thank you for the kind words.. glad you like.. dg- hey there, buddy, pal... thanks for popping in and reading, and BIG THANKS for the 'WOWWY!!'.. means alot coming from you.. love and hugs, my friend.. blackwidOw- thanks so much for the kind words... glad this one made you feel at home.. i love the poetic response.. Denise- thanks bunches... glad you enjoyed... thanks again all, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
vicky, you really think that you will be successful in making me shun away from your work? Dream On!!! lovely poem btw  [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 11-26-2000).] |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
SO SO GOOD!!! I can only say WWWOOOWWW!!!! I LOVED THIS!!!! Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
kaile- lol...nope...i wouldn't want to scare you that bad.. thanks so much for the read, my friend. glad you enjoyed. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Whisper's Caress- thanks so much for the enthusiastic response... really glad you enjoyed it. ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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