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....then I'll be over you
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....then I'll be over you |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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When mornings come and I don't wake to feel your presence there Or sniff to smell the fragrance of your perfume in the air When I don't try to wave goodbye as I drive out of view Or look to see you blow a kiss - then I'll be over you. When I don't think to tell you of some silly joke I heard Anticipating how your eyes will smile with every word When I don't stop to call you just before my day is through To say how much I love you, girl - then I'll be over you. Another man will listen to words once reserved for me. He'll kiss the lips that once propelled me into ecstacy. I know that, for my sanity, the only thing to do Is look for some small signs that say I'm finally over you. So, when the robins lose their voices - when the stars don't shine When the blood stops pumping through this aching heart of mine When leaves don't fall in Autumn and June skies do not turn blue And angels do not wear your face - then I'll be over you. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Balladeer- you could not have summed me up any better! a truly bleeding piece of work, and i am pretty sure everyone know how it feels. (in case you don't, it sucks) the last stanza says it all. remarkable. well penned. I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?" |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sad...and reminiscent of feelings altogether familiar. Truly beautiful and touching as usual for you though. Did I ever say I adore your work?  My name isn't Baby, and I don't want to cyber. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So, when the robins lose their voices - when the stars don't shine When the blood stops pumping through this aching heart of mine When leaves don't fall in Autumn and June skies do not turn blue And angels do not wear your face - then I'll be over you. ======================== I dont wish for you to get over me I made a mistake ... this I now see How could I leave such devotion behind this beautiful poem serves to remind Can you find it in your heart to forgive me do you think we can rewrite history Ill be better than I was before Ill make your heart flutter more and when you come home at the end of the day Ill say those words you long to hear me say- "I'm so glad your home...you KNOW I AM"... I made you dinner Deer... green eggs and SPAM  hehehehehe *kisskiss* couldnt resist ... *winkiewinkie* .. OH AND.... (ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis) later-love-poem-gator me |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I'm saying 'wow' a lot tonight, but, Wow! How very poignant! I loved it!! sp Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
spoken like a true romantic - and there's so few of us left ~G~ - seriously - a very good penning 'deer |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
When mornings come and I don't wake to feel your presence there Or sniff to smell the fragrance of your perfume in the air When I don't try to wave goodbye as I drive out of view Or look to see you blow a kiss - then I'll be over you. When I don't think to tell you of some silly joke I heard Anticipating how your eyes will smile with every word When I don't stop to call you just before my day is through To say how much I love you, girl - then I'll be over you. Another man will listen to words once reserved for me. He'll kiss the lips that once propelled me into ecstacy. I know that, for my sanity, the only thing to do Is look for some small signs that say I'm finally over you. So, when the robins lose their voices - when the stars don't shine When the blood stops pumping through this aching heart of mine When leaves don't fall in Autumn and June skies do not turn blue And angels do not wear your face - then I'll be over you. This is just devine Balladeer...thanks for sharing Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
what a great way to show your love this way, a true beauty....your way of writing is really great and I enjoy it everytime again, reading your poetry....thank you for sharing it |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is really really beautiful Balladeer Maree |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, HO HUM, just your usual excellent work. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, your usual excellence on display again! Absolutely beautiful!! Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Even melancholy fits you well... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Such softly written thoughts. I admire the variety in your poetry. You have the ability to make the reader feel the event ... that's poetic talent, my friend. You're loaded with it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer....I hope I never have to be over the power of your verse....always it moves me in one way or another...lovely |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Balladeer, You should become a country singer. You can write crying in your beer songs.  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i love reading this one..so beautiful and it should be a song. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Sigh ... how incredibly beautiful Balladeer. You've taken such sorrowful emotions of loss, and with the closing stanza, were able to make it ever so much more poignant still. When these eyes can no longer see ... I will have your poetry read to me ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I just had to respond to this as a separate response! Corinne [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 10-07-2000).] |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Very Nice...........Enjoyed this very much Jon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
beutifully written, but that last line captivated all the angels in this place. Very romantic, which is the way I like them (And perfect, of course) |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Balladeer, it's so hard getting over somebody isn't it? Well said. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Bal, this was very touching and heartfelt... So your saying it'll be a long time before your over me... Its a good thing I don't eat spam.... but I do eat Kam.... its good fried on an old time stove in the woods. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
my mascara is running.....what a beautiful heart you have... i can identify with this one... it's beautiful, Balladeer... thank you for sharing |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
 This painted a lovely picture of sadness and happiness at the same time. Getting over someone is never easy and it's like being left with a fine canvas of memories that shouldn't ever fade.< !signature--> Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-07-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ethan...yes, I'm afraid few people have been spared this feeling. Thank you... temptress...yes, you did but please don't stop Janet Marie...I'm SO glad you have seen the error of your ways! Spam forgives all!!! snowpants...I appreciate the WOW! Thank you Wilfred...I am afraid you're right but, from one to another, I thank you... tracie...the pleasure is mine charisma...your words are very kind. I'm glad you like my offerings. Thank you. Dark Angel..I treasure any compliment from you.... Sy...hehe. I HATE being boring! Denise..you are always so SWEET!!! Sunshine...it should, my girl. We are not strangers  Marge..."loaded with it" sounds so much better than "full of it"! I thank you, sad Seminole sufferer hoot...just seeing your name moves me. I'm SO glad to see you!!! inot2B...that's always been a dream of mine! Thank you very much... Victoria...yes, I can hear it being sung. Thanks for thinking so, too Kit....if that happens, call me. I'll read it to you personally Corinne...response seen and admired. thank you!!jon....thanks for making a comment to me your 1000th post! Congrats Elizabeth...I like them that way, too. I'm glad we have that in common!!! Tara....so I have heard.... Parker...Kam? isn't that a foreign dish??? hehe. I could get over you in olympic time!! doreen...allow me to wipe off that mascara....gently. Your reply is equally as touching. Thank you... Rose...It is wonderful when the painting of the happiness never fades but heartbreaking when the sadness doesn't, either Thank you, my friend.. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Mike....My love...When will you realize? Theres NO getting over me!! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Balladeer-Sensational, I felt this one. I never knew how much the heart was capable of aching until I lost someone special myself. Hugs. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Now...hummmph...about that team of writers you have working with you writing this fabulous stuff...They (YOU) sure did a great job with this one!! |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This one brings tears to my eyes. deb |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Awww 'Deer this is so beautiful. Sad but beautiful. What a tender and loving heart I see here. Soft hugs, Juls |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
This was so sad but sweet. It made me cry. ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
"Deer...this was so heartfelt and tender...made me want to cry!! It sounds like a sad love song!! Very beautifully written!! Take Care, Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
OMG!!! Ballader.. this is such... this is so.... omg, I'm speechless. This was absolutely beautiful, and that is a COMPLETE UNDERSTATEMENT!!!!!!!!!! If this was written for a male, it would describe the way I feel perfectly... in fact, even though it's not, it still does! I am completely overwhelmed by how great this is... still very very speechless (hence, my rambling on). I wish I could express how this poem makes me feel, because it would flatter you truely! "It was my love that did us both to death. " -Sylvia Plath |
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Ladycat
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
What can I say that hasn't been said already? WOW!! I'm glad that I came back in time to see this one.. ummm and if I wasn't married.. oh wait that isn't what I meant to say.. Wonderful piece as usual. All this time I have been gone and I see that you haven't missed a beat.. Love, Lady Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
ladycat, it's puurrrrrfectly wonderful to see you here, my dear, but you're using my icon!!!! hisssssssssssss... being the gentle feline that i am, i'll forgive you this time senor balladeer, éste es un pedazo maravilloso de poesía. amo su trabajo y le amo, también .... meeeeeeeooooowwww *wink* beware pandora's box... |
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Ladycat
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
I've come back home to reclaim my icon from Pandora!! LOL Love, Lady< !signature--> Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. [This message has been edited by Ladycat (edited 10-08-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have such a soft and gentle understanding of the desire and the disappointments found in the journey of Love...James |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
'deer... I'm left at a loss of words. Typical when I really like a poem.  I can never find the right words to express how I so much loved someone's post. So, with that, I'm off. I love this piece of yours. ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Can I borrow this? *S* It answers an email I got this weekend from a buttinsky better than I ever could... some things are eternal... whether it's convenient or not, whether it's hopeless or not... it is. *S* Great work! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 10-09-2000).] |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
lovely and poignant no wonder this one inspired response poems [This message has been edited by RAM (edited 10-09-2000).] |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
looks like if I cat now I can get these 2 poems together on the list |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Bal~ simply beautiful work! you write with such elegance...i know you're a jokester and all and have a reputation lol but you do write quite lovely and this piece proves that point very well. take care. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sir you have made me cry |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
ladycat....lissssstennnnn up.... hisssssssssssssssssget off my icon or your cat s*it is history... *g and who knows? i might be all OVER YOU!!! hehe... *wink* puuurrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr.... mmeeeeeeeoooww (whoops, sorry balladeer.. couldn't help myself... you know how that goes... geez  )beware pandora's box... [This message has been edited by pandora (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
MM...you make me a blubbering pile of mush with such words. Ahhhhh.... you are the best! |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Oh my! So lovely! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Balladeer, this is another great one you, the master poet, have penned... Thank you for a splendid read this evening Coco |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
with 46 replies, I don't know how i almost missed this, maybe I am blind....it is wonderful....and perfect as is everything you write...hugs |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deer, you don't need me to tell you how good this is, but I'm going to anyway. This is my fifth reading of your wonderful poem, the first four times I was too overcome by emotion to reply, I guess absence really does make the heart grow fonder and not the reverse. It's wonderful writing and it has something that reaches out and grabs me by the heart then gives a little twist, you Sir have a poet's soul (but we already knew that )Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I would like for every one of you wonderful poets to know I have taken your comments to heart and appreciate them VERY much. It's a topic that too many can relate to, unfortunately |
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