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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 2000-10-12 06:32 AM



You became my undeserved gift
Showing me your magical touch
Providing an angelic lift
Something I had needed so much

My heart like barren desert floors
Lying scorched under the orb of fear
You promised thunderous downpours
My soul quaking as the storms near

Fear I’ll break with your touch so strong
That I’ll be lost within the storm
You soothe me with hypnotic song    
Within your eyes the storm clouds form

Dance of silver droplets begin  
Steam rises as you touch me    
Cool drops cover me like satin
My senses acute and running free

Scents of fire and rain fill the air
Lightening cuts the sky like a knife
Quenching thirst of need with sweet care    
Showering my soul with love and life

As you move the heavens and earth
Passion calls with thunder and light
I’m in awe of my own rebirth
As the storm rages on with might

The torrent fills and soaks me through
With thunderous cries you delight
A net of light holds our love true
The heavens glow as we unite

Rain falls with hypnotic pleasures
Calling barren earth to join  you
Uncovering hidden treasures
Around  us desert flowers grew

You promised peace with the ending rain
I begged  you not to let me go
You said goodbye, we’d meet again
Then you wrapped me in a rainbow

Repost from VOTW


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-10-12 07:43 AM


ahhhh yes...I remember this beauty well...
i remember thinking...
did  she drink some of me raspberry tea *winkiewinkie*  
this is one of my faves...
you wrote it with so many beautiful images
laced with so many deep felt emotions ...
and that last line....
poetry in motion my sweet SS...
thank you for sharing it again...
started my day out with sunshine
love ya me girliegirl
me

Corinne
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2 posted 2000-10-12 07:48 AM


This is so lovely, Butterflies, very full of nature's metaphors for love and life.

Corinne

Kitty**
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3 posted 2000-10-12 08:21 AM


What can I say...??
BEAUTIFUL..I LIKE!!

Kitty

Robert Joseph
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4 posted 2000-10-12 08:33 AM


Butterflies_dont_cry, there is much to enjoy in this piece of thriving passions and desire. Your descriptive prowess is in full force.

Robert Joseph



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-10-12 09:00 AM


If you are wrapped in a rainbow then you were not left alone.  Just a new way of protecting you I believe.  There is still gold at the end of the rainbow and maybe getting wet when it rains is not as bad as you have always deamed it to be.  Some storms need to be ridden and can do damage, but, others can be enjoyed in the warmth of someone else's arms and heart if the hues are received as they are and are allowed to paint a picture of tomorrow.  In time , my friend, In time you will learn to paint in life the way you do with your words.  
Victoria
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6 posted 2000-10-12 11:08 AM


So lovely butterflies dont cry...as always..

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Charisma
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7 posted 2000-10-12 11:19 AM


oh butterflies I love this one
*sigh*....love the way you describe and coloured it all....great work,  

Charisma

Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 2000-10-12 03:58 PM


Jan* Well the way you rave about the stuff...you know I had to buy a few cases   Thanks for the name of your supplier **winkie winkie**

Corrine* Thank you so very much~

Kitty* I'm honored, thank you~

Robert* Thank you for your kind reply~

Mark* Many thanks to you my friend, your sunshine comments are always a treat~

Victoria* You are much to kind...thank you~

Charisma* Thank you, your comments are always appreciated~

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
9 posted 2000-10-12 04:06 PM


Aww... it's ok I guess...  
Cerenity
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10 posted 2000-10-12 04:46 PM


Miss. Butterflie,

Lovely poetry here, so very much enjoyed, thank you.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)


Butterflies_dont_cry
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11 posted 2000-10-12 09:39 PM


SC's* hmmmmm thank you....I think    

Cerenity* Thank you so much for reading~

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2000-10-12 09:48 PM


mmmmmm....a treat of a read Holly....you have such a delicate touch that packs a punch at times....and I am sighing much too much t'nite...but I thank you.  Love ya lady.
Denise
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13 posted 2000-10-12 09:48 PM


Very beautifully done, Butterflies!

Denise

Daniel J D
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14 posted 2000-10-12 10:12 PM


Butterfly,
You are so accomplished. The words from this magnificient poem is so true to your heart.
I just wished I could have been that rainbow


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
15 posted 2000-10-13 02:03 AM


Love a "good" storm!!!!!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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16 posted 2000-10-13 07:37 AM


S'en* Never tooo many *sighs*...lol Love ya my friend~

Denise* Thank you so much~

Daniel* Thank you very much, you are much to kind~

Mark* Me too...the more lightening and thunder the better!!

EagleOne
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17 posted 2000-10-14 06:25 PM


Dare I say it? This is without doubt one of your best my friend.  

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Lone Wolf
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18 posted 2000-10-14 11:15 PM


BDC,

Beautiful and descriptive writing my friend.  So nice to see this one again.  
Hoping all is well with you.  **HUGS**

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Janet Marie
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19 posted 2000-10-15 10:44 AM


silly me...I forgot to put this in me library
Hmmmm and I aint even the BLONDE one     LOL
*kisskiss* *winkiewinkie*
me

Aimster
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20 posted 2000-10-15 11:28 AM


Holly~

this is simply breataking. beauty echoes through every line. this is definitely my favorite of yours...though that was a very hard decision indeed! i loved not only the emotion put into this but the imagery and feelings it invokes in the reader. i was in the middle of that storm it seemed experiencing something incredible. girl you got a true gift. and it's a joy to be able to read such talent. thanks for staying around  
take care and love ya,
amy  

"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"


Aimster
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21 posted 2000-10-15 08:53 PM


ahemmm why is this all the way down here?? LOL up you go!!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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22 posted 2000-10-16 05:14 PM


Eagle* I hope to continue to update your choice of favorites...lol Thank you my friend!

LW* Thank you for your always gentle comments my friend I appreciate them so very much~

J.M.* Hmmmm did I ever mention that "blonde" can be contagious...ooops   probably should have mentioned that a few months ago!

Amy* Awe sweetie you are much to kind but I thank you from the bottom of my heart for your reply...and the boost...lol  

CocoBaci
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23 posted 2000-10-16 05:22 PM


BUTTERFLIES...         beautiful!!

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