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OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

0 posted 2000-10-05 03:49 PM

Couldn't Care Less

Couldn't Care Less went to bed,
A cap of reason on his head,
He found to keep his dreams at bay,
A night cap was the only way,
His night shirt knit from dreamless sleep,
Held guilty secrets in its keep,
He found the shirt insombulant,
The pockets torn, inelegant,
And as he tried in vain to sleep,
A secret slipped from shirt to sheet,
Transformed into a nightmare thing,
Upon his leg began to cling,
Then stealthy, climbed it, up the bed,
Beneath the cap, into his head,
Into his conscience deftly bore,
And Couldn't Care Less was no more.

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

1 posted 2000-10-05 03:55 PM

Nice one, keep those dreams happy, that's the way . I really liked the way you have written this one, enjoyed it . Thanks alot .

L.of.L. Tom .

Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

2 posted 2000-10-05 06:27 PM

I plan on not going to sleep with a guilty secret. I don't like the consequencies. Enjoyed this very much.

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

3 posted 2000-10-05 06:59 PM

Angelswing Thanks for your reply I appreciate you reading my first post in a long time, I'm a ship that doesnt pass this way very often lol, and from a fellow Englishman.

Inot2b.... You got it in one, be afraid be very afraid.

Take care
OLIAS

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2000-10-05 09:04 PM

Wow! I really liked this. A perfect meter! I'll look forward to reading more Olias!

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

5 posted 2000-10-06 01:21 PM

P.D. Thank you for reading my poem, sorry I couldnt thank you sooner, seems there just isnt time to do the things we enjoy anymore.
Take Care
Olias

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-10-06 05:48 PM

hey YOU..

I was thrilled to see your name back here...
thank you for your sweet words on my poem..
and it was a sweet treat to read this work of yours...
you know I love your rhyme divine ...
please dont stay away so long
take care
jm

English Rose
Member

since 2000-08-20

Posts 211
Berkshire, England

7 posted 2000-10-06 06:29 PM

This was a good read!....reminded me of schooldays, you know....Jack Sprat would eat no fat etc.,.....very good indeed

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

8 posted 2000-10-07 12:35 PM

Hi J.M. Thanks for your response, Its good to hear from you again. There are so many new people on here. I will try and just keep dipping my toe in the passions pool, now and then, life is flying by so fast at the moment, I'm flying out to the states on Monday to see my girlfriend we havent seen each other for 5 months.

Take care Olias

E.R.
Thank you for your kind response to my post, i tried to give it a nursery rhyme quality and I'm glad that you liked it.

Regards
Olias

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