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Empty Heartbreak |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
Some things you never know until its time is done Like how beautiful the day was...till the setting of the sun I never felt your love, coursing through my soul Until without you here...I wasn’t completely whole Walking away to use the gifts that you so freely gave Looking back would be like revisiting my own cold grave The view today is so much darker than before Longing for sunshine smiles to rain on me once more I reach to hold you close and feel your tender strength But you’re not here....because I held you at a sheltered length I start to speak and share a moment of my trying day A tear rolls down my face...wondering if you are feeling the same way I claimed never to have felt love the way you did explain How is it that I could remain dry...while standing in the rain Now as I start on the journey to hope that I must take I know now I love you...because I just felt my empty heart break |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Great writing! Wonderful elaboration of 'you don't know what you've got 'til it's gone!' I loved it! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh how i wish I could break a promise made and send this to someome tonight...it might help in a decision being made...thank you |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Tears, It is sad that we don't apreciate what we have until it vanishes. This was well written and I'm glad I stopped for a read ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I claimed never to have felt love the way you did explain How is it that I could remain dry...while standing in the rain Now as I start on the journey to hope that I must take I know now I love you...because I just felt my empty heart break To me these lines say it all. I don't know the situation but if he loves you and you love him then I wouldn't waste too much time in hurting. Staying dry in the rain????? Come on....you were soaked....let him know how you feel and take that plunge....sorry if I got carried away but as you will see from me ..... sometimes I do.LOL...just some advice from a little ol cowboy...hope to see much more of your work. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TearsOfGrace~ 'How is it that I could remain dry...while standing in the rain' That's a lonely spot to be in ... sometimes you've just gotta let it all hang our and go for the gusto ! Hope you can just take a chance and let that someone know. A breaking heart is a lonely thing to hold alone. Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Some things you never know until its time is done Like how beautiful the day was...till the setting of the sun I never felt your love, coursing through my soul Until without you here...I wasn’t completely whole thank you for this words, it could be me too....it made me think, thank you for sharing your words with us |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Tears, Beautiful! But don't let "you don't know what you've got till it's gone" be your cliched epitaph; I agree with Mark, if you love him, go to him, give him that love. If he still loves you, he'll take you back into his heart. Very well done; powerful writing. - Jeff |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
Thank you all very much for reading and giving your wonderful advice. I could give you the same advice if the rolls were reversed, why is it we can give but find it hard to follow Thanks! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Some things you never know until its time is done Like how beautiful the day was...till the setting of the sun I never felt your love, coursing through my soul Until without you here...I wasn’t completely whole ======================== A tear rolls down my face...wondering if you are feeling the same way I claimed never to have felt love the way you did explain How is it that I could remain dry...while standing in the rain Now as I start on the journey to hope that I must take I know now I love you...because I just felt my empty heart break ==================== Hello again Tears~ ... you couldnt know this but you write my heart in this emotinally touching and heart felt poem. I like your stlye...will be keeping an eye out for your work. take care jm I |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
What a compliment, coming from a writer of your talent, yes I've been reading, it's an honor, Thank you JM. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
So very true, I definately like this and relate so much. I hope you find happiness. There are enough colours in the world, To paint your own dreams, You won't get them, Till you try. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Glad I went digging, as I keep finding gold...there is such a sad and fragile quality to this...absolutely lovely writing, Grace... |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
Thank you both for your replies I appreciate them and you. |
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